Talk:Far from the Tree (film)/GA1
Latest comment: 2 years ago by Kaleeb18 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Kaleeb18 (talk · contribs) 14:17, 2 April 2022 (UTC)
Well this makes me so sad. I reviewed the entire article, and while I had another tab open that I was looking at I came back to this one and the page refreshed so now I must redo the entire review :( ― Kaleeb18TalkCaleb 14:17, 2 April 2022 (UTC)
Prose edit
- There is not much in the lead that talk about the producion section of the article
- The infobox says the music was done by Nami Melumad, but I do not see that anywhere in the article
- ...because there's nowhere else to put it? There is no coverage of her work on the short
- Then shouldn’t there be a RS backing that up?
- Well, the film's credits already serve as the WP:PRIMARY source for the information
- Then shouldn’t there be a RS backing that up?
- ...because there's nowhere else to put it? There is no coverage of her work on the short
- I feel like the November 24, 2021, release date in the infobox should also have something with parenthesis around it saying something like theatrical release
- Why, though...
- Well, if I’m the reader I guess I would want to know what the second release was for. Or maybe I’m just dumb and should know the second release means theatrical.
- Well, according to {{Film date}}, it's for the locations... and there's a discussion somewhere that says it should not include the location if it was the location in which the film was produced
- Well, if I’m the reader I guess I would want to know what the second release was for. Or maybe I’m just dumb and should know the second release means theatrical.
- Why, though...
- Also is English really needed in the infobox, because the character do not even talk
- I mean, Rotten Tomatoes lists the language as English
listening to the ocean waves in it
– I would put ocean wave noises so it does not sound like there are ocean waves in the seashell- Done
angrily scolds her for leaving, pointing out his scar
– this sounds like the father is talking to the coyotewho acts much as she did
– as much as?research trip to Canon Beach.
– I would add Canon Beach, Oregon.- Done
Nourigat noted the abundance of raccoons in their natural habitat while on a research trip to Canon Beach. She immediately considered them as the short's main characters.
– These two sentences can be combined- Done
and story artist, respectively.
– respectively is not needed- Needed to clarify one was a production supervisor and one was a story artist, not that they were both of these or something
- Gotcha
- Needed to clarify one was a production supervisor and one was a story artist, not that they were both of these or something
Disney's Meander drawing system
– If Disney's Meander refers to meander (art), I think meander should link to that. But idk if it is referring to that since I have no clue what Disney's Meander is- Don't think so, reading the linked article
simple accessory but ended
– comma before butreleased alongside theatrical screenings Encanto
– of Encanto- Done
received positive response
– is it supposed to be responses? you could also maybe say a positive responseRomper stated it
– should be a that after stated unless the quotation marks were just forgotten- Done
considering it have some of
– to have- Done
- Maybe you can use an image of Cannon Beach in production so readers can see what it look likes compared to the short
Well, that's it for my review. This is just my two cents, but if your looking for a DYK hook you could create one based off how the raccoons were originally going to be humans, cause that was interesting. ― Kaleeb18TalkCaleb 16:50, 2 April 2022 (UTC)
- Alright I think the article is ready to pass the review. ― Kaleeb18TalkCaleb 13:08, 13 April 2022 (UTC)
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