Talk:Fabrik Inc.
Latest comment: 10 years ago by W Nowicki in topic Written Like an Advertisement
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Written Like an Advertisement edit
I would like to suggest making the following changes in order to correct the tone
Remove: "Fabrik’s bundled hardware and software products can be found at major retailers, office supply stores and a variety of online retailers."
Remove: "in various capacities and styles"
The Company History section should be before Products & Services.
Reword the sentence that starts: "The company also has a pure online backup approach"
Throwing out the suggested changes for any comments before taking off the flag. Scooter put a flag on my talk page, and I thought for sure someone else wrote the content, but there I am all over the history section! —Preceding unsigned comment added by David44357 (talk • contribs) 17:52, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
- I agree with that assessment and (re-)inserted an advert tag. Besides the stuff you mentioned, the article has an enormous number of extlinks to company press releases and the like. 67.122.209.126 (talk) 08:23, 18 May 2009 (UTC)