Talk:FC Bayern Munich 1–2 Norwich City F.C. (1993)/GA1
Latest comment: 4 years ago by MWright96 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 14:05, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
Shall take on this review as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 14:05, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section):
b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
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Lead
edit- Wikilink volley to Volley (association football)
- "is considered the greatest goal in Norwich's history" - by whom?
- Added the supporters vote. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 18:27, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- "The second leg was played on 3 November 1993 and was drawn 1–1," - how about and ended in a 1–1 draw,?
- Meh, horses for courses, but done. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 18:27, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
Background
edit- "two points behind Werder Bremen and four behind league" - repetition of the word "behind"
- Couldn't do it so had to ditch Werder Bremen. Repetition gone. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 18:25, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- "This perception couldn't help but reach the players," - no contractions please per MOS:CONTRACTION
- Shocking. Gone. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 18:25, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- "including the most recent World Cup," - how about plain 1999 FIFA World Cup instead?
- I imagine you meant 1990 FIFA World Cup and that's there now. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 18:25, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- "The Independent assessed Norwich's tactics as follows:" - whom exactly from The Indepdent?
- Added Trevor Haylett. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 18:25, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
Pre-match
edit- "the Bayern general manager, Uli Hoeneß," - MOS:SEAOFBLUE violation here
- Strictly there's a non-blue comma, but meh, reworded anyway. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 18:29, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- "had been cautious in his words to German media before the match," - to the German
- "Rainer Seele pointed to Norwich's excellent away record" - think a more formal word should replace the one highlighted in bold
- No need for it at all, the following sentence is purely factual and covers it nicely. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 18:29, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
First half
edit- Wikilink cross to Cross (association football)
- "after winning a free-kick when" - should be free kick for consistency
- Wikilink penalty area
- "whose volley from 20 yards" - the convert template should be used on the text in bold
- Wikilink corner to Corner kick
- Wikilink header to Header (association football)
- "Norwich continued to effectively soak up the pressure exerted by Bayern Munich;" - what about a more formal phrase to replace the wording in bold
- Tried a reword, see what you make of it. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 18:36, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- "said "Norwich are two up. This is almost fantasy football!" - the BBC Sport does not mention the first sentence of this quote
- Removed first part which, frankly, added literally nothing. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 18:36, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
Second half
edit- "Michael Sternkopf replaced Ziege in the 60th minute, and five minutes later Bruno Labbadia replaced Mehmet Scholl." - repetition of the word "replaced"
- "Matthaus pushed further forward." - I feel like there is some detail missing from this sentence
- Dweller can you look at this? The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 19:04, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- I've revised. How's it looking? --Dweller (talk) Become old fashioned! 16:29, 17 May 2020 (UTC)
- Dweller can you look at this? The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 19:04, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- Wikilink injury time to the relevant article
- No relevant article really so I've linked to wiktionary, let me know if that's a problem. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 19:04, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
Reactions
edit- "Reflecting on the improbability of such a result, FourFourTwo wrote," - who exactly for FourFourTwo?
- Dweller this for you too. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 19:05, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- It wasn't by-lined. It was probably a group effort. --Dweller (talk) Become old fashioned! 16:26, 17 May 2020 (UTC)
- Dweller this for you too. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 19:05, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- "that after the first goal, Norwich played very deep and Bayern should have played through the wings more and shot more often, that Ziege came off when he was playing well, Helmer had not helped Sternkopf and Labbadia should have been brought on sooner, something the Bayern fans called for by chanting "We want Bruno"." - this entire portion of text should be rewritten where possible
Second leg
edit- "Norwich were relegated from the Premier League the following season,[4] and as of 2020, Norwich have not qualified to play in European competition again." - repetition of "Norwich"
- "including the Champions League in 2001 and 2013." - wikilink both years to the appropriate articles
Legacy
edit- "The match was the only time a British side beat Bayern in a game played in the Olympiastadion." - the BBC Sport source does not say it was the only time Bayern Munich experienced their sole defeat to a British club in the Olympiastadion
- "and eventually clinch their sixth title in the competition." - not mentioned by the BBC Sport source. Another reference is needed to verify this correct information
Notes
edit- "but were prevented from competed after English clubs were banned from European football following the Heysel Stadium disaster." - typo; competing
References
edit- Reference 9 is linked to the general Bayern Munich UEFA page and not on its specific achievements
- I think Reference 22 is not correctly linked as it is to Matthäus' home page
- I believe it was to demonstrate his age, so I have replaced it with a Britannica source. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 09:22, 16 May 2020 (UTC)
- The archive link for Reference 31 does not appear to be working
- Works for me. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 19:26, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- Does the FourFourTwo supplement have a specified page that contains the article?
- No, it was a brief supplement, and like short PDFs, page numbers aren't obligatory. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 19:26, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- References 39 and 42 should include the title along with the original German title
- Why? They're in German language so why do we need to translate them? It even says (German) in the ref. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 19:27, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- Easily added. Done. Harrias talk 09:02, 16 May 2020 (UTC)
- Easy for you to sprechen. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 09:06, 16 May 2020 (UTC)
- Easily added. Done. Harrias talk 09:02, 16 May 2020 (UTC)
- Why? They're in German language so why do we need to translate them? It even says (German) in the ref. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 19:27, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
Am going to put the review on hold to allow the nominators to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 17:32, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 17:25, 17 May 2020 (UTC)