Talk:Extreme Spots/GA1

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Mediran in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Taylor Trescott (talk · contribs) 02:58, 1 September 2013 (UTC)Reply

I'll look into this article. Taylor Trescott - my talk + my edits 02:58, 1 September 2013 (UTC)Reply

Thank you Taylor Trescott for review this article! :) Mediran (tc) 04:18, 1 September 2013 (UTC)Reply

All right.

  • "The series follows the adventures of the title character in the underwater city of Bikini Bottom" is unrelated to the episode's plot, which takes up that paragraph in the lead. I think you should move that line to the end of the first paragraph.
  • "In the episode, SpongeBob and Patrick try to do their best to join The Drasticals extreme sports team." This reads kind of weird. You should place "The Drasticals" after "extreme sports team." So: "to join the extreme sports team The Drasticals."
  • "Upon release, the episode drew 3.7 million viewers, and met positive reviews." Add a "was" before "met" and a "with" after it. So "was met with."
  • "Johnny give SpongeBob and Patrick tasks to do to pass" Here, "give" should be "gives."
  • "Johnny asks if SpongeBob and Patrick do other activities" Add a "can" after "Patrick."
  • The production and reception sections are fine.  

Placing the article   On hold so you can fix these minor issues. Taylor Trescott - my talk + my edits 20:20, 1 September 2013 (UTC)Reply

Again, thank you very much Taylor Trescott for the review. Also, thank you for the pass of the previous review at Band Geeks. Have a nice day! :) Mediran (tc) 10:48, 2 September 2013 (UTC)Reply
Very nice. Passed. Taylor Trescott - my talk + my edits 15:00, 2 September 2013 (UTC)Reply
Thank you very much! :) Mediran (tc) 09:25, 3 September 2013 (UTC)Reply