Talk:Evicted!

GA Review

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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 01:54, 8 January 2014 (UTC)
Nominator: Gen. Quon (Talk)

Hi! I'll be reviewing this article for GA status, and should have my full review up shortly. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 01:54, 8 January 2014 (UTC)

1: Well-written

• a. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
• b. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

WP:LEAD:

Check for WP:LEAD: Check for Correct Structure of Lead Section:  Done Check for Citations (WP:LEADCITE):  Done Check for Introductory text:  Done Check for Provide an accessible overview (MOS:INTRO):  Done Major Point 1: Plot "The series follows the adventures of Finn (voiced by Jeremy Shada), a human boy, and his best friend and adoptive brother Jake ... Finn and Jake their house back because she finds them entertaining." (summarised well in the lead) Major Point 2: Production "The episode was written and storyboarded by Bert Youn and Sean Jimenez, from ... who would go on to play a larger role in the series as a friend and companion to Finn and Jake" & "The character of Marceline was present in the series' pitch bible ... features the first song that was produced for the series: "The House Hunting Song"." (summarised well in the lead) Major Point 3: Reception ""Evicted!" was watched by 1.88 million people ... the episode is an example of the emotional complexity of the series." (not a concise summary of the Reception section) Check for Relative emphasis:  Done Major Point 1: Plot "The series follows the adventures of Finn (voiced by Jeremy Shada), a human boy, and his best friend and adoptive brother Jake ... Finn and Jake their house back because she finds them entertaining." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 2: Production "The episode was written and storyboarded by Bert Youn and Sean Jimenez, from ... who would go on to play a larger role in the series as a friend and companion to Finn and Jake" & "The character of Marceline was present in the series' pitch bible ... features the first song that was produced for the series: "The House Hunting Song"." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 3: Reception " ""Evicted!" was watched by 1.88 million people ... the episode is an example of the emotional complexity of the series." (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body) Check for Opening paragraph (MOS:BEGIN):  Done Check for First sentence (WP:LEADSENTENCE):  Done "Evicted!" is the twelfth episode of the first season of the American animated television series Adventure Time. Check for Format of the first sentence (MOS:BOLDTITLE):  Done Check for Proper names and titles:  Done Check for Abbreviations and synonyms (MOS:BOLDSYN): None Check for Foreign language (MOS:FORLANG): None Check for Pronunciation: None Check for Contextual links (MOS:CONTEXTLINK):  Done Check for Biographies: NA Check for Organisms: NA Check for Biographies of living persons: NA Check for Alternative names (MOS:LEADALT):  Done Check for Non-English titles: Check for Usage in first sentence: Check for Separate section usage: Check for Length (WP:LEADLENGTH):  Done Check for Clutter (WP:LEADCLUTTER): None

WP:LAYOUT:

Done Check for WP:LAYOUT:  Done Check for Body sections: WP:BODY, MOS:BODY.  Done Check for Headings and sections:  Done Check for Section templates and summary style:  Done Check for Paragraphs (MOS:PARAGRAPHS):  Done Check for Standard appendices and footers (MOS:APPENDIX):  Done Check for Order of sections (WP:ORDER):  Done Check for Works or publications:  Done Check for See also section (MOS:SEEALSO): None Check for Notes and references (WP:FNNR):  Done Check for Further reading (WP:FURTHER): None Check for External links (WP:LAYOUTEL): None Check for Links to sister projects: None Check for Navigation templates:  Done Check for Formatting:  Done Check for Images (WP:LAYIM):  Done Check for Links:  Done Check for Horizontal rule (WP:LINE):  Done

WP:WTW:

Done Check for WP:WTW:  Done Check for Words that may introduce bias:  Done Check for Puffery (WP:PEA):  Done Check for Contentious labels (WP:LABEL):  Done Check for Unsupported attributions (WP:WEASEL):  Done Check for Expressions of doubt (WP:ALLEGED):  Done Check for Editorializing (MOS:OPED):  Done Check for Synonyms for said (WP:SAY):  Done Check for Expressions that lack precision:  Done Check for Euphemisms (WP:EUPHEMISM):  Done Check for Clichés and idioms (WP:IDIOM):  Done Check for Relative time references (WP:REALTIME):  Done Check for Neologisms (WP:PEA): None Check for Offensive material (WP:F***):  Done Check for WP:MOSFICT:  Done Check for Real-world perspective (WP:Real world):  Done Check for Primary and secondary information (WP:PASI):  Done Check for Contextual presentation (MOS:PLOT):  Done

WP:EMBED:
None Prose is preferred over list (WP:PROSE): Check for Tables (MOS:TABLES):

2: Verifiable with no original research

• a. Has an appropriate reference section: Yes
• b. Citation to reliable sources where necessary: very good (Thorough check on Google. Cross-checked with other GAs)

WP:RS:

Done Check for WP:RS:  Done Cross-checked with other GAs: Adventure Time, Adventure Time (pilot), Adventure Time (season 1), Adventure Time (season 2), Adventure Time (season 3), Adventure Time (season 4), Adventure Time (season 5). Referred one pending FL for rough verification - List of Adventure Time episodes. Check for the material (WP:RSVETTING): (not contentious)  Done Is it contentious?: No Does the ref indeed support the material?: Check for the author (WP:RSVETTING):  Done Who is the author?: Seibert, Fred (Frederator Studios) CartoonNetwork.co.uk Ward, Pendleton; Seibert, Fred (Scribd) Rynda, Phil (Formspring) Ward, Pendleton (VYou) Wired Orange, B. Alan (MovieWeb.com) Muto, Adam (Formspring) Stopera, Dave (BuzzFeed) McHale, Pat (Twitter) Basichis, Casey James (CaseyJamesBasichis.com) Gorman, Bill (Zap2it) Larry Leichliter, et al. (Warner Home Video) Shea, Cam (News Corporation) Ward, Pendleton (Formspring) Sava, Oliver (The Onion) Does the author have a Wikipedia article?: What are the author's academic credentials and professional experience?: What else has the author published?: Is the author, or this work, cited in other reliable sources? In academic works?: Check for the publication (WP:RSVETTING):  Done Frederator Studios CartoonNetwork.co.uk Scribd Formspring VYou Wired MovieWeb.com Formspring BuzzFeed Twitter (Twitter is used in source 10 but it satisfies about themselves criteria.) CaseyJamesBasichis.com Zap2it Warner Home Video News Corporation Formspring The Onion Check for Self-published sources (WP:SPS):  Done Twitter is used in source 10 but self-published or questionable sources may be used as sources of information about themselves, especially in articles about themselves, without the requirement that they be published experts in the field.

WP:MINREF:

Done Check for inline citations WP:MINREF:  Done Check for Direct quotations:  Done "with the female characters it’s easy to either write them as clichés or write them as the extreme opposite of those clichés […] I just try to make them have faults and strengths just like Finn and Jake have."[6] (Check on source 6, successful, " I was actually just explaining this earlier today to someone — with the female characters it’s easy to either write them as clichés or write them as the extreme opposite of those clichés. ") "definitely impressed by the character" ... [7] (Check on source 7, successful, source 7 is a voice cast "What time is it?! It's Adventure Time! While at SDCC 2011, Creator Pendleton Ward joined his voice cast, ...Check out our exclusive Adventure Time interviews below.") "she has really cool style […] I love what they come up with [in] every episode."[7] (Check on source 7, successful, source 7 is a voice cast "What time is it?! It's Adventure Time! While at SDCC 2011, Creator Pendleton Ward joined his voice cast, ...Check out our exclusive Adventure Time interviews below.") "is classically trained as a bassist and can do just about anything".[11] (Check on source 11, inaccessible, Error: XML parsing failed) "sure, in this episode she evicts Finn and Jake from their home ... but hey, this is the first time we meet her and she's awesome."[16] (Check on source 16, successful, Listed as the fourth best moment "4) Meeting Marceline, the Vampire Queen (Episode: Evicted!) Marceline = best. I mean, sure, in this episode she evicts Finn and Jake from their home, leaving them to wander Ooo in search of a place to live, and before the episode’s done they wind up battling it out, but hey, this is the first time we meet her and she's awesome.") "Marceline = best".[16] (Check on source 16, successful, as above) "good about that. It's nice".[17] "emotional complexity" ... [18] "beneath Adventure Time's weirdness" ... [18] Check for Likely to be challenged:  Done Check for Contentious material about living persons (WP:BLP): NA

• c. No original research:  Done

WP:NOR:
Done Check for primary sources (WP:PRIMARY):  Done Check for synthesis (WP:SYN):  Done Check for original images (WP:OI):  Done

3: Broad in its coverage

a. Major aspects:

Done Cross-checked with other GAs: Adventure Time, Adventure Time (pilot), Adventure Time (season 1), Adventure Time (season 2), Adventure Time (season 3), Adventure Time (season 4), Adventure Time (season 5). Referred one pending FL for rough verification - List of Adventure Time episodes. Check for Article scope as defined by reliable sources: Check for The extent of the subject matter in these RS: Check for Out of scope: Check for The range of material that belongs in the article: Check for All material that is notable is covered: Check for All material that is referenced is covered: Check for All material that a reader would be likely to agree matches the specified scope is covered: Check for The most general scope that summarises essentially all knowledge: Check for Stay on topic and no wandering off-topic (WP:OFFTOPIC):

b. Focused:
Done Check for Readability issues (WP:LENGTH): Check for Article size (WP:TOO LONG!):

4: Neutral

WP:NPOV:

Done 4. Fair representation without bias:  Done Check for POV (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for naming (WP:POVNAMING):  Done Check for structure (WP:STRUCTURE):  Done Check for Due and undue weight (WP:DUE):  Done Check for Balancing aspects (WP:BALASPS):  Done Check for Giving "equal validity" (WP:VALID):  Done Check for Balance (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for Impartial tone (WP:IMPARTIAL):  Done Check for Describing aesthetic opinions (WP:SUBJECTIVE):  Done Check for Words to watch (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for Attributing and specifying biased statements (WP:ATTRIBUTEPOV):  Done Check for Fringe theories and pseudoscience (WP:PSCI): None Check for Religion (WP:RNPOV): None

5: Stable: No edit wars, etc: Yes

6: Images  Done (Creative Commons Attribution 2.0 Generic license) & (NFC with a valid FUR)

Images:

Done 6: Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:  Done Check for copyright tags (WP:TAGS):  Done Image 1 (Evicted-Adventure Time screenshot.jpg): This image is a screenshot of a copyrighted television program or station ID. As such, the copyright for it is most likely owned by the company or corporation that produced it. It is believed that the use of a limited number of web-resolution screenshots (1) for identification and critical commentary on the station ID or program and its contents, and (2) on the English-language Wikipedia, hosted on servers in the United States by the non-profit Wikimedia Foundation, qualifies as fair use under United States copyright law. Other use of this image, on Wikipedia or elsewhere, might be copyright infringement. Image 2 (OliviaOlsonComicCon2011.jpg): This file is licensed under the Creative Commons Attribution 2.0 Generic license. This version permits free use, including commercial use. Hence this image complies with The license must permit both commercial reuse and derivative works. Check for copyright status:  Done Image 1 (Evicted-Adventure Time screenshot.jpg): Non-free content. Image 2 (OliviaOlsonComicCon2011.jpg): Free. Check for non-free content (WP:NFC):  Done Image 1 (Evicted-Adventure Time screenshot.jpg): Yes. Image 2 (OliviaOlsonComicCon2011.jpg): No. Check for valid fair use rationales (WP:FUR):  Done Image 1 (Evicted-Adventure Time screenshot.jpg): valid. Source (WP:NFCC#4): http://animatedtv.about.com/od/picturegallerie1/ig/-Adventure-Time--Pictures/Marceline.htm (Screenshot from the TV show) Use in article (WP:NFCC#7): Evicted! Purpose of use in article (WP:NFCC#8): For identification purposes in conjunction with discussion of the topic of the article. Replaceable? (WP:NFCC#1): This image is a screenshot of a television show, and therefore any other pictures of this likeness would also be copyrighted. (Since it's a copyrighted character, there are no free alternatives available.) 6: Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:  Done Check for image relevance (WP:IMAGE RELEVANCE):  Done Image 1 (Evicted-Adventure Time screenshot.jpg): Relevant. Image 2 (OliviaOlsonComicCon2011.jpg): Relevant. Check for Images for the lead (WP:LEADIMAGE):  Done Appropriate & Representative Check for suitable captions (WP:CAPTION):  Done Caption 1: "Marceline sitting on the couch with Finn and Jake." succinct and informative Caption 2: "Marceline is voiced by Olivia Olson." succinct and informative

As per the above checklist, the issues identified are:

• The lead does not provide an accessible overview for the Reception section.
• The lead does not give relative emphasis to the Reception as is given in the body.

This article is a very promising GA nominee. I'm glad to see your work here. I'm putting the article on hold. All the best! --Seabuckthorn ♥ 21:31, 11 January 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for this very good review. How do these edits look?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 01:29, 12 January 2014 (UTC)

Good. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 02:03, 12 January 2014 (UTC)

OK, everything looks good now. Passing the article to GA status. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 02:03, 12 January 2014 (UTC)

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