Talk:Everything You've Come to Expect/GA1

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Nominator: IXCat (talk · contribs) 21:46, 9 January 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 17:33, 17 June 2024 (UTC)Reply

It is reasonably well written.
a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a. (reference section):

b. (citations to reliable sources):

c. (OR):

d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a. (major aspects):

b. (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

I will review this over the next two days! --K. Peake 17:33, 17 June 2024 (UTC)Reply

Perfect! Thank you for reviewing the article, I'll try to respond to any inquiries in a timely manner. IXCat (talk) 18:02, 17 June 2024 (UTC)Reply

I've fixed most of the notes you've left so far. Sorry for the messy punctuation. I'll fix it throughout the unreviewed sections as well. IXCat (talk) 17:22, 18 June 2024 (UTC)Reply

Infobox and lead

Please change the infobox recording date to simply 2015 since Summer is not a recording month
Remove overly obvious wikilinks on major world cities in London and Paris
"It was produced in Malibu by" → "Production was done in Malibu by"
I think you should merge the string arrangement player into the same sentence as the other musicians, also you do not need a comma before and in British English
"in November 1969, the original picture" → "in November 1969; the original picture"
The maximalist production needs to be written out and sourced in the body
"blue-eyed soul, and psychedelic pop. It also draws influence from" → "blue-eyed soul and psychedelic pop, with influences from"
"funk, disco, and" → "funk, disco and"
"Its lyrical content explores themes of" → "The lyrical content explores themes of"
The lead is not only slightly disordered, the information is also lacking for enough paragraph sentences – please make the singles a full sentence for the album in the last sentence of the second para
"romance, and self-doubt," → "romance and self-doubt," with the pipe
Where is the nightlife part sourced in the body?
"generally positive reviews, with critics noting the" → "generally positive reviews from critics, who mostly noted the"
Start a new sentence at the welcoming of their style since reception can be two sentences
"It became the band's second and" → "The album became the Last Shadow Puppets' second and"
Add more info about the tour in the last sentence here please

Background and recording

Start a new sentence at the meanwhile part, although Colour of the Trap is not mentioned by the source
Start a new sentence at "This reminded" to avoid a run-on
"with it as well."" → "with it as well"." per MOS:QUOTE
"Kane's apartment in London, Paris, and" → "Kane's apartments in London, Paris and"
"which they said was "the oldest song in the album"," → "which the Last Shadow Puppets said was "the oldest song" in the album," per where the source uses the quotes
Pipe Shangri La Studios to Shangri-La (recording studio)
"produced the album." → "produced Everything You've Come to Expect." since the title should be used by here
"The Last Shadow Puppets began recording" → "the Last Shadow Puppets began recording" per MOS:THEMUSIC
Re-invoke the ref after the sentence using the direct quote
"The band was also joined" → "The Last Shadow Puppets was also joined"
"The album was recorded" → "Everything You've Come to Expect was recorded"
Pipe United Recording to United Western Recorders
"nearby karaoke bar, and to" → "nearby karaoke bar and to"

Composition

Musical style and influences

Reword the img text to mentioning that this was both by critics and the band
"Musically it has been described as a "a" → "Musically Everything You've Come to Expect has been described as "a"
"soundscapes of the 1960s."" → "soundscapes of the 1960s"." per MOS:QUOTE
Per British English, please do not have commas before "and"
The disco elements and Italian film scores are not sourced
"The Replacements,[20], Queens of the Stone Age,[24][20]" → "the Replacements,[20], Queens of the Stone Age,[24]" per MOS:THEMUSIC and removing duplicate usage of [20] when it does not mention Queens of the Stone Age
"Isaac Hayes and The Style Council, as opposed" → "Hayes and the Style Council, as opposed" per above
"and Serge Gainsbourg, "I always" → "and Gainsbourg, "I always"
"When You're in Love with a Beautiful Woman" should be surrounded by speech marks
"and The Prodigy as bands" → "and the Prodigy as bands"

Lyrics and themes

Quote box should have the song title in speech marks and context as to when Turner said the quote
Same issue as previous with commas before and
"Lyrically, the album's main themes" → "Lyrically, Everything You've Come to Expect's main themes"
Remove overly obvious link on sex
The recreational drug usage part is not sourced and pipe to Illegal drug trade
Jealously is not sourced and dreams is too obvious for a wikilink
"lust figures often,"[39] and described" → "lust figures often",[39] and described"
Wikilink Ennio Morricone
"the doomed protagonists."" → " the doomed protagonists"." per MOS:QUOTE
"from their first album, and have been" → "from The Age of the Understatement and have been"
Remove the links and release years of Submarine and Suck It and See
"of Los Feliz, and cities" → "of Los Feliz and cities"
"such as Sheffield, and Paris." → "such as Sheffield and Paris."
"more refined," than the ones" → "more refined" than the ones"
"more surreal or abstract."" → "more surreal or abstract"."
"Further adding, "You still," → "He further added, "You still,"

Songs

""Aviation", the album's opening track," → ""Aviation", the opening track of Everything You've Come to Expect,"
"scrape of strings."" → "scrape of strings"." per MOS:QUOTE
"part of one iris is" → "part of one eye is"
"Its second verse uses the term" → "The second verse uses the term"
The "coke-head close" part is not sourced and you need a ref invoked here anyway since it uses a direct quote
"my mind for years,"[41]" → "my mind for years",[41]"
""I think, not always," should not have a starting speech mark because the quote already began
"Musically, the track's been described" → "Musically, the track has been described"
"On "Miracle Aligner" the album its at" → "On "Miracle Aligner", the album is at"
""lush" and "seductive."" → ""lush" and "seductive"."
"a "breezy melody,"[42] and makes" → "a "breezy melody"[42] and makes"
""make-believe wrestler."" → ""make-believe wrestler"." although this quote is not sourced
"are "really old,"[42] with the song being" → "are "really old",[42] with "Miracle Aligner" being"
"Shadow Puppets umbrella."" → "Shadow Puppets umbrella"."
"saying, "is obviously about" → "saying, "it's obviously about" plus the full-stop should not be inside speech marks
"described as "honeyed soul-pop."" → "described as "honeyed soul-pop"."
"been called "Beatle-esque."" → "been called "Beatle-esque"." and the ref should be invoked here instead
"as "a jealous guy," among" → "as "a jealous guy", among"
Change to Bowie's album of the same name instead of David Bowie and add the release year in brackets
"my head,” was described as "textbook Turner lust."" → "my head", was described as "textbook Turner lust"."
"last song written for the album, and" → "last song written for Everything You've Come to Expect and"
Pipe ballad to Sentimental ballad
"to his dance music origins,"" → "to his dance music origins","
Remove link on funk
Move full stop to being outside of the quote for "Holy Mothership"
"violins,"[23] with "Iggy Pop-like intensity."" → "violins",[23] with "Iggy Pop-like intensity"." and remove the link on Pallett
"in Sonic's Rendezvous Band's "City Slang."" → "in Sonic's Rendezvous Band's "City Slang"."
"like, a punky edge."" → "like, a punky edge"."
""career best vocal."" → ""career best vocal"."
"Its has a" → "The song has a"
""lounge singer grandeur."" → ""lounge singer grandeur"."
"rider,"[20] with lyrics that" → "rider",[20] with lyrics that"
"comic self loathing."" → "comic self loathing"."
""high-drama stabs."" → ""high-drama stabs"."
"it's one epic track," both likened" → "it's one epic track", both likened"
Remove link on Arctic Monkeys
Remove links on Suck It and See and Humbug
"track with "Isaac Hayes influenced" strings," → "track with "Hayes influenced" strings,"
"Lyrically being a" → "Lyrically, the song is a" and remove the speech mark from quote
"The album's final track," → "The final track of Everything You've Come to Expect,"
""lugubrious and lizardy."" → ""lugubrious and lizardy"."
The Boardwalk → the Boardwalk per MOS:THEMUSIC
"up through Sheffield City Centre There" → "up through Sheffield City Centre/ There" and remove the links on these two cities
Remove comma after Los Feliz and the introduction of bandmate since we know it is simply Kane easily
"get it [...] slow."" → "get it [...] slow"."
"his "default position."" → "his "default position"."
"hero's lament,"[20] which stands" → "hero's lament",[20] which stands"
"to imposter syndrome."" → "to imposter syndrome"."
Remove wikilink on Lou Reed
"of Turner's serene Submarine."[26]" → "of Turner's serene Submarine".[26]" and remove the link

Artwork and title

"The album art consists" → "The art for Everything You've Come to Expect consists"
Remove wikilink on New York City, although this is not sourced unless the vrt ref has it mentioned in the audio?
Per the source, mention that he gave it a gold tint for a colour scheme and contemporary feel that resonates more
Change to simply Bowie
"artwork 2016. The prize was organised by" → "artwork 2016, a prize that was organised by"
"as the band thought" → "as the Last Shadow Puppets thought" plus the sentences using direct quotes need the ref(s) invoked, also why is Under the Radar at the end when it only backs up the first sentence?
"Turner has also described" → "Alex Turner has also described"

Release and promotion

"on the album sparked by a tweet from arranger Owen Pallett, album producer James Ford stated" → "on Everything You've Come to Expect sparked by a tweet from Pallett, Ford stated"
"with other shots of the band." → "with other shots of the Last Shadow Puppets." plus there is more synopsis from the NME ref that you can add here
"On 21 January, the band announced their album" → "On 21 January 2016, the Last Shadow Puppets announced Everything You've Come to Expect"

Singles and videos

Retitle to Singles, as they were all these with videos released
"The lead single, "Bad Habits", was released on 10 January 2016 alongside" → "The album's lead single, "Bad Habits", was released on 10 January 2016, alongside" with this wikilink instead
Wikilink music video
The dive bar performance is not sourced
Remove the links on singles
"been described as "A" → "been described as "a"
Pipe cinemascope to CinemaScope and add info about the synopsis briefly per sourcing
"Although, "Everything You've Come to Expect" was first released on March 10," → "Although, "Everything You've Come to Expect" was first released on 10 March 2016,"
"a deserted Californian beach."" → "a deserted Californian beach"." per MOS:QUOTE

Tour

Merge with the below section and retitle to Tours and other performances
Remove overly obvious wikilink on Europe
"Mexico, and Japan." → "Mexico and Japan." per the refs being too many jumbled together, please move some to earlier in the sentence for the relevant countries
"opening performance, and the Last Shadow Puppets" → "opening performance and the Last Shadow Puppets"
"In March and April they announced" → "In March and April 2016, the band announced"
"During the tour they were" → "During the tour the Last Shadow Puppets were" but only Alexandra Savior is sourced
Wikilink as music festivals
Wikilink Coachella
Pipe Radio 1's Big Weekend to BBC Radio 1's Big Weekend
Pipe Rockwave to Rockwave Festival
"T in the Park, and Lollapalooza in Chicago." → "T in the Park and Lollapalooza in Chicago."
"On April, the band played a" → "In April 2016, the Last Shadow Puppets played a"
Pipe Glastonbury to Glastonbury Festival
"a cover of "Moonage Daydream" in memory of David Bowie." → "a cover of "Moonage Daydream" in memory of Bowie."
"On July, the band played two nights" → "In July the Last Shadow Puppets played two nights"
Remove overly obvious wikilink on London, although Alexandra Palace is not sourced
Lowercase the Smiths per MOS:THEMUSIC and remove the full stop from inside the song title
Pipe Loren Humphrey to Guards (band)
"Tyler Parkford, and string section members" → "Tyler Parkford and string section members"

Other performances

Make this the last para of the above sub-section
"The band made a number of" → "The Last Shadow Puppets made a number of"
"in promotion of the album" → "in promotion of Everything You've Come to Expect"
"In March, they played" → "In March 2016, they played"
Remove comma after Flux FM
Remove overly obvious wikilink on London

Critical reception

Mention what the Aggregator AnyDecentMusic? gave the album in prose
"nature, and wrote that the album "improves over time."" → "nature and wrote that it "improves over time"." per MOS:QUOTE – please fix these issues throughout this section when they are not full sentences quoted
"said "The album is" → "said "the album is" and invoke the ref at the end per direct quoting
Put some of The Line of Best Fit review into your own words per WP:OVERQUOTE and also italicize the title Everything
The NME review is confusing; this starts a new quote at the "provoke" part inside a quote anyway, please put more into your own words and remove wikilink on NME
Only use Pallett's surname here
"full-time band," but overall" → "full-time band", but overall" plus re-invoke the ref at the first sentence for Telegraph
"thought the album was" → "thought Everything You've Come to Expect was" and re-invoke the ref on this sentence per direct quoting
"saying, "You can" → "saying that "you can" because this is not a full sentence
"as "nuanced," she ended up the review" → "as "nuanced"; she ended up the review"

Accolades

This can be written in prose and as a separate para rather than sub-section, as it's only one accolade

Commercial performance

Please add this section because you need to write out the chart performance in prose, adding sources too if there is any about things like sales

Track listing

See MOS:TABLECAPTION for the first track listing
Pipe Rob Chapman to Rob Chapman (journalist)

Personnel

Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel

Charts

See MOS:TABLECAPTION for both the tables

Certifications

See MOS:TABLECAPTION

References

Copyvio score looks fine at 35.9%!!!
Fix dead links by using the tool to archive and add access-dates for any references missing these
Pipe The National to The National (Abu Dhabi) on ref 1
Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 4
Wikilink Digital Spy and remove staff from ref 5 since that is not a sufficient author
Wikilink NRC Handelsblad on ref 9
Lowercase Spin on ref 10 for consistency
Lowercase Humo and pipe to Humo (magazine) on ref 11
Italicize NME in the title of ref 13
Change Pitchfork Media to Pitchfork on refs 15 and 71 and pipe to Pitchfork (website)
L.A. Weekly → LA Weekly with the wikilink on ref 17
Cite United Recording as publisher instead and pipe to United Western Recorders on ref 18
Remove or replace Exposed Magazine since I see no evidence of reliability, unless you can justify this
Wikilink The Times on ref 24
OOR → Oor with the wikilink on ref 29
Fix MOS:QWQ issues with refs 30, 31, 48, 69, 95 and 99
Add work/publisher to ref 32
Remove or replace Northern Transmissions on ref 35 per Wikipedia:Reliable sources/Noticeboard/Archive 419 and earlier discussion too
Add Berkeleyside on ref 37 with the wikilink
Culled Culture strikes me as falling under WP:SELFPUB so remove or replace this please
Author-link Kitty Empire on ref 40
Cite KPCC as publisher instead on ref 41
Make ref 42 consistent with ref 109 by citing as The Daily Telegraph and author-link Neil McCormick
Italicize NME on ref 43
Author-link Zane Lowe on ref 44
Fix MOS:QWQ issues and cite Consequence instead on ref 45
Pipe Interview Magazine to Interview (magazine) on ref 50
BBC 4 → BBC Four with the wikilink on ref 53 and cite as publisher instead
Cite Sirius XM as publisher instead on ref 54
Cite BBC as publisher instead with the wikilink on refs 58, 100 and 105
Remove ref 60 because this is a duplicate of ref 58
Ref 61 is missing a date
Cite Under The Radar as magazine instead and pipe to Under The Radar (magazine) on ref 62
Fix MOS:CAPS and MOS:QWQ issues with ref 73
Promo News → Promonews on ref 76 citing as work/website
Fix MOS:QWQ issues and cite Stereogum as work/website instead on ref 77
Wikilink NME on refs 79 and 90
Pipe Time Out to Time Out (magazine) on ref 80
Cite Twitter as publisher instead with the wikilink on refs 81, 82, 83, 85 and 88
Brooklyn Vegan → BrooklynVegan with the wikilink on ref 87
Cite Studio Brussel as publisher instead on ref 102
Are you sure setlist.fm is reliable for refs 103 and 104?
Cite Spotify as publisher instead on ref 106
Cite Rough Trade as publisher instead on ref 114
Cite iTunes Store as publisher instead on refs 115 and 116
Remove or replace ref 117 per WP:DISCOGS

Final comments and verdict

On hold until all of these issues are fixed; good luck even though this is a bit sloppy! --K. Peake 21:03, 18 June 2024 (UTC)Reply

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