Talk:Eurasian eagle-owl/GA1

Latest comment: 9 years ago by Cwmhiraeth in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 12:57, 13 September 2014 (UTC)Reply

  • Hi, I'll review this. I've done a bit of media editing. Maybe a photo of an individual with spread wings or flying would be a good addition? FunkMonk (talk) 12:57, 13 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
Any spread wing photo? Here are some:[1][2][3] FunkMonk (talk) 10:24, 16 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
One of these photos added. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:22, 16 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • The taxonomy section could give some detail about relationship with other owl species. What are its closest relatives, who named it, etc.
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:06, 16 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • There is a pdf under External links that could maybe be used as source for additional info?
Any word on the PDF? FunkMonk (talk) 10:24, 16 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
I have added a section on moulting. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:22, 16 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
Thanks for taking on this review. I will work on your suggestions. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:05, 13 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • "The eagle owl is a very large and powerful bird," Powerful seems a bit too loaded and ambiguous. I've seen discussions about this term in other bird of prey articles. I'd remove it.
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:05, 15 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • With such a wide ranging species with so many subspecies, I'd expect a load of synonyms and taxonomic disagreement?
It seems that there are just two synonyms. I would prefer not to delve into taxonomic disagreements unless you insist. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:06, 16 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • "Two owls formerly considered subspecies of the Eurasian eagle owl are now recognized as distinct species: the pharaoh eagle-owl (B. ascalaphus) and the rock eagle owl (B. bengalensis).[10]" This belongs under taxonomy.
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:05, 15 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • Do some subspecies lack ear tufts?[4]
I'm not sure. It seems that males have more upright tufts. The description comes from a book Owls of the World to which I don't have access but this is a nice source. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:06, 16 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • "When perching they adopt an upright stance with plumage closely compressed and may stand tightly beside a tree trunk in a similar fashion to a long-eared owl.[12]" Makes more sense under behaviour, I'd say.
Moved. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:06, 16 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • "In June 2007, an eagle owl nicknamed 'Bubi' landed in the crowded Helsinki Olympic Stadium during the European Football Championship qualification match between Finland and Belgium and interrupted the match for six minutes.[14] Finland's national football team have had the nickname Huuhkajat (Finnish for Eurasian eagle-owls) ever since. The owl was named "Helsinki Citizen of the Year" in December 2007." Too much detail, little to do with habitat. I'd cut it vastly down. Maybe move it down under status, not sure where else it would fit.
This was here before I started on the article and I have cut it down already. I'd be happy to remove it entirely.Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:05, 15 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
Then just remove it. I'm sure dozens of similar stories could be found. FunkMonk (talk) 10:24, 16 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • Sometimes you only write eagle owl, but I'd use the full name, especially since eagle owl can refer to other species.
Done. Even worse, it was sometimes hyphenated and sometimes not. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:05, 15 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • "as also are" Is this proper English? Not a native speaker, so puzzled me.
Its good English. Your English is so good that I was unaware it was not your native tongue. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:05, 15 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
Thanks, my first language is Danish... FunkMonk (talk) 10:24, 16 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • "Hunting usually consist of" Consists?
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:05, 15 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • "in their large territories." Any word on how large?
Added. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:06, 16 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • The last paragraph under breeding has little to do with that subject, maybe move it to behaviour.
The previous paragraph mentions age of maturity so age at death (and causes of death) seem to follow on from this. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:06, 16 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • "give it a fierce expression." Only mentioned in intro. Seems a bit subjective.
Removed. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:06, 16 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • Nice, articles often contain external links with additional info, so it can be useful to look out for them, and use them as sources. I have no more to add (you can do with the Helsinki info what you want), so I'll pass this! FunkMonk (talk) 18:42, 16 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
Thank you for an efficient review. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:13, 16 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
Just pointing out that the chunk of plagiarised text removed from the article was not added by me but was present before I started working on it. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:01, 30 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
Would it be possible to re add it in rewritten, sourced form? Seems quite some important info was removed. FunkMonk (talk) 06:40, 30 September 2014 (UTC)Reply
The relevant section has now been rewritten using a different source. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 07:48, 3 October 2014 (UTC)Reply