Talk:Ethan Allen Express/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 04:49, 25 November 2022 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Fresh eyes might find more to do as this GA has languished for four and a half months. Worth noting that between nomination and now, the Burlington extension opened, but that has been added in a GA-quality matter. Not much to do, really. 7-day hold to Pi.1415926535. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 04:49, 25 November 2022 (UTC)

@Sammi Brie: Thanks for the detailed review! I've fixed all the grammar issues, and two comments on other issues are below. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 23:10, 26 November 2022 (UTC)

Copy changes

CinS = User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences.

Lead

• It was the first passenger service to Rutland since 1953, and the first to use the line between Rutland and Whitehall since 1936. remove comma (CinS)
  •  Done
• An infill station in Fair Haven, Vermont was..., An extension to Burlington, Vermont with... MOS:GEOCOMMA needed. Check for more of these throughout the article. There's even one in a photo caption.
  •  Done I think I found them all

Service

• Trains operate with two GE P32AC-DM dual-mode locomotives, one at each end, which operate on third rail electric power in Penn Station and the Empire Connection tunnel, and on diesel power for the rest of the route. Remove the second comma (CinS)
  •  Done

History

• Prior service between Rutland and points south was operated by the Delaware and Hudson Railroad over the Whitehall Branch (Rutland–Whitehall) and Washington Branch (Castleton–Eagle Bridge), and by the Rutland Railroad over its mainline (Bellows Falls–Rutland–Burlington) and Chatham Branch (Rutland–Chatham) remove that comma too (CinS)
  •  Done
• Amtrak took over intercity passenger service in the United States in 1971, and resumed the overnight Montrealer in 1972. Remove comma (CinS)
  •  Done
• The third paragraph becomes a slog with all the service changes, probably the only time in an article of yours I've gone "that belongs on Foamipedia". Consider reducing the detail level.
  • It is a bit detailed, but that's the result of me doing my best to summarize a complicated history (that takes up the better part of a page in the source book.) Unfortunately, I don't think there's any additional simplification I can do that doesn't either miss important points or lose context needed later.
• The project was funded by both the railroad and the state of New York at a cost of $3.25 million, and involved rebuilding about 8 miles (13 km) of track and eight grade crossings Remove comma (CinS)
  •  Done

Sourcing and spot checks

Earwig's highest-shared source is 14.5% with passages that include proper nouns, unavoidable strings of such like "Ethan Allen Express from Burlington to Essex Junction via", and such banal phrasing as "due to the COVID-19 pandemic". No issues there.

8 of the 77 refs were chosen for spot-checking, with no issues found:

• 7: I have a bit of trouble parsing this document especially as it's part of a combo ref. I believe it's being used for the 60 and 59mph figures? Y
• 24: Original timetable backs up listing of stops. Y
• 28: Another timetable. Can't say I'd encountered one of these before, but it looks right... Hard to parse, though. Y
• 33: At least this is a newspaper article that mentions Amtrak...selling ski packages and changing the timetable to match. Y
• 54: Given Amtrak’s allegation that poor track conditions account for 91 percent of the Ethan Allen Express’ delays Y
• 62: Press release mentioning the $1 promotional fare...it's basically ABOUTSELF for this, and it's only being used for that fact. Y
• 68: Trains article on the relocation of the former Rutland station.
• 69: Article on the separately funded Middlebury tunnel project.

Other items

• The images are all freely licensed, PD (the 1907 Rutland engraving), or used with permission (Hikki Nagasaki). All but the video have alt text (yes, you can give alt text to a video, and "refer to caption" will suffice).
  • The video does have existing alt text: Video of a passenger train with a locomotive and five passenger cars

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