Talk:Episode 6188/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by JuneGloom07 in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Lemonade51 (talk · contribs) 17:28, 8 August 2012 (UTC)Reply

Funnily enough, I did watch this episode of Neighbours. About the same point I stopped watching the show. Think this meets the criteria on prose, referencing and did do a good job of jogging the memory. Just minor quibbles:

  • "30 minute timeframe" → should be hyphenated so "30-minute timeframe"
Done.
  • "Kyle comforts Kate while she cries for Mark." for him? about him perhaps.
Done.
  • "The real-time episode was broadcast on 22 June 2011 in Australia" I'm not sure why this is under the filming section. I suggest moving it under the 'Reception' header as the first sentence.
Done.
  • Likewise, date for its Channel 5 premiere? Can be added under reception too.
Done.
  • "while the paper's Andrew Murfett commented" sorta implies that there is a Murfett role in every newspaper. Best to be specific and state that he is a critic.
Done.

No issues with images or sourcing. On hold for seven days. Lemonade51 (talk) 17:28, 8 August 2012 (UTC)Reply

Ah, you've missed out on some great storylines since then. Thank you for the review! - JuneGloom Talk 21:07, 8 August 2012 (UTC)Reply