Talk:Enuga Sreenivasulu Reddy/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 15:34, 1 March 2021 (UTC)

Happy to review this article.

Review

Lead section / Infobox

• I would consider expanding the lead section a bit to include more than his UN career, as it seems to be rather on the short side at present.

•  Done

• Link diplomat.

•  Done

• Ref 1 (Times Live) is not needed in the lead section, as the information it cites is uncontroversial – and it doesn’t verify the information.

•  Done

• Refs 2a (nelsonmandela.org) and 3a (NYT) are not needed either.

•  Done

• Unlink South Africa (MOS:OL.

•  Done

• Who was Mahatma Gandhi?

•  Done If this text needs to change, please do let me know. Thanks.

1 Early life

• The link to freedom fighter doesn’t lead to where you expect it to. The text should be amended so that it does.

•  Done

2 Career

• The title of this section is not accurate, as the last paragraph in it describes his activities during his retirement.

• Open to your suggestions, and inputs on a header here. Thanks.

Y Sorted. Amitchell125 (talk) 07:49, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

• Link internship, colonialism, pan-Africanism.

•  Done

• Who were Paul Robeson, W. E. B. Du Bois and A. B. Xuma?

•  Done

• Unlink New York, Government of South Africa (MOS:OL).

•  Done

• Ref 9 (Gandhi and South Africa) doesn’t verify the information.

• The book itself will be the reference for this statement.

• It's not what he accomplished as Assistant Secretary-General of the UN. Could his achievements be included here?

•  Done

• I would amend he went on to write to 'he wrote'.

•  Done

3 Awards and recognition

• There needs to be just one link to Joliot-Curie World Peace Council Prize - World Peace Council prizes.

•  Done. Not sure if this is what you were looking for. Happy to redo, please let me know. Thanks.

Y Link tweaked by me. Amitchell125 (talk) 07:50, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

• 'the nation's fourth highest civilian honor' - requires a citation.

•  Done

N Why is it the 'fourth highest'? ("Bharat Ratna is the highest civilian award of the country." - https://padmaawards.gov.in/AboutAwards.aspx).

Amitchell125 (talk) 08:20, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

 Done. Added another link. Please see if this means the previous link can be removed. Thanks.

• For his works to eliminate apartheid could be phrased better.

•  Done

4 Personal life

• Link Turkish literature.

•  Done

5 Positions

• Is this section needed? It seems to be a duplication of information provided elsewhere.

• Ambivalent on retaining / removing it. I have seen articles have this view that gives a succinct timeline of roles / positions. If it is alright, would prefer we leave it. Please let me know if that is alright.

@Ktin: I'm OK with it staying, but all the dates either need to have brackets, or have them removed. The section is imo in the wrong place, and should be included using a === level title with the Career section. Amitchell125 (talk) 07:56, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

 Done. Great catch on that bracket inconsistency as well. My bad. Ktin (talk) 00:25, 18 March 2021 (UTC)

6 Books and 7 References

• The link for Mahatma Gandhi, Letters to Americans: Compiled and Edited by E.S. Reddy should go, as it doesn’t provide further information.

• Can I ask for some assistance here. I just used the book cite format / auto-cite function. Not sure how I can fix this.

Y Sorted. Amitchell125 (talk) 08:06, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

• A url is available for Duberman - https://archive.org/details/paulrobeson00dube/page/284/mode/2up.

•  Done

• Ref 7 (FT) – subscription required template needed.

•  Done

• Ref 10 (Worldcat) doesn’t verify the text.

• Changed to ref #7 now. Let me know if this needs additional clarifn.

N Worldcat names Reddy as the co-author of this book, but does not verify the text in the article ("[He] edited anthologies of Gandhi's influence on... ... America.") You need to find another reference. Amitchell125 (talk) 08:15, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

 Done Also added the FT.com link which specifically calls out anthologies and SA / America. Ktin (talk) 00:29, 18 March 2021 (UTC)

• A url is available for Guha - https://archive.org/details/gandhibeforeindi0000guha .

• Did not follow this one, link currently exists in the Guha reference. Current ref #11

Got it. Amitchell125 (talk) 08:24, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

• Ref 15 – same as another source listed?

•  Done

8 External links

• The link to the papers doesn’t seem to allow online access to them—am I correct? If so this link shouldn’t really be in this section (or amend it to saying “Information about…)

• Reworded. Please see if this is better. Thanks.

My apologies for not being clearer, the website is only a record of his papers, and they cannot be downloaded. Your wording needs to reflect this, by saying something like ' Record details of the E.S. Reddy collection of papers held at Yale University'. Amitchell125 (talk) 08:04, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

 Done Thanks. Ktin (talk) 00:26, 18 March 2021 (UTC)

On hold

An interesting article to review. I've put it on hold for a week (until 18 March) to allow time for any comments to be addressed. Please discuss with me any queries you have. Amitchell125 (talk) 08:47, 10 March 2021 (UTC)

Amitchell125, Greetings! Many thanks for the detailed and very thoughtful set of notes. I will get to them and share updates. I am currently going through some busy times off-wiki / IRL. Please can I request some additional time for me to get back. i.e. beyond 18 March. Thanks. Ktin (talk) 01:42, 15 March 2021 (UTC)

No problem, I'll check out your work on 22 March, Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 09:18, 15 March 2021 (UTC)

Thanks for the very thoughtful comments and detailed review, Amitchell125. I had some spare time and was able to get to this ahead of my own expectations. I have added my notes above for all the changes incorporated. While most of the feedback has been incorporated, there are a couple that I might need your assistance with. Please have a look and let me know of your thoughts at your convenience. Thanks again. Ktin (talk) 02:45, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

Many thanks Ktin for your work, only 4 points remain to be completed. Amitchell125 (talk) 08:27, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

@Amitchell125 Thanks much for that very quick revert. I have taken a pass at addressing the remaining items. Please have a look at your convenience. If I have inadvertently missed anything, please let me know. Ktin (talk) 00:30, 18 March 2021 (UTC)

Passing

It all looks good now, thanks for your work! Amitchell125 (talk) 16:26, 20 March 2021 (UTC)