Talk:Emotions (Mariah Carey album)/GA1

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GA Review

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Reviewer: - (CK)Lakeshade - talk2me - 07:29, 30 May 2011 (UTC)Reply

Lead
  • "Additionally, Emotions features influences of a range of genres such" --> change to "from a"
  • "Upon release, Emotions received generally mixed reviews from music critics; many of them had mixed feelings regarding the album's material." Remove where i have striked as its redundant, of course the material is the thing that is mixed, they are not commenting on her face =P
    • Haha Sassy :P
Critical reception
  • "He called the album's lead single "bone chilling," however calling some of the album's high notes "vocal range overkill." Not a proper sentence. Please rewrite.
  • "He outed" is used twice, this is not the word you are looking for; i would use "called" "chose" "selected" ect ect, something like that.
  • "however calling most of the album unoriginal and not an improvement over her debut." Tense issue, however he called
  • "DeKnock called some of the album's ballads "boring," however calling Carey's voice "breathtaking." Again, tense, "he called" not calling.
References
  • 72, remove italics on Allmusic and wrong publisher.

Overall great work on this article. Please message me once these are addressed. - (CK)Lakeshade - talk2me - 07:29, 30 May 2011 (UTC)Reply

  • Unless im blind, "dance-pop" in the info box is not sourced anywhere or mentioned in the article.
  • "According to Nielsen SoundScan, the album's stateside sales are estimated at over 3,584,000, not including sales from BMG music clubs." is also unsourced.