Talk:Elizabeth Olsen/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 20:11, 22 May 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 20:11, 22 May 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Per MOS:ORDER, hatnotes should go right below the short description.

 Done Chompy Ace 02:01, 28 May 2021 (UTC)

• "Award among other awards" sounds repetitive. Maybe "accolades"?
  •  Done KyleJoan^talk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)

Early life and education

• "in musical theatre camp" → "in a musical theatre camp"
  • I'm not sure this holds the same meaning. The reference does not specify that it was one camp; I think the intention was to generally say she spent time attending camp the way people would say they went to sleep-away camp as children. I also believe the appropriate phrasing is at camp as opposed to in camp, so I made the change. I hope this suffices. KyleJoan^talk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
• This source (#12) does not mention Campbell Hall School.
  • I replaced the Marie Claire ref with The Hollywood Reporter, but I couldn't find a source that verifies for what grades she was there, so I removed that part. KyleJoan^talk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
• Shouldn't "Off-Broadway" be written as off-Broadway in the article?
  •  Done KyleJoan^talk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)

Career

• Distribute the 3 references after Endgame.
  •  Done KyleJoan^talk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
• "comedy drama" → "comedy-drama"
  •  Done KyleJoan^talk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
• Distribute the sources after "slyly sympathetic".
  •  Done KyleJoan^talk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
• The references after "respective reviews" should be swapped (NPR before Vox).
  •  Done KyleJoan^talk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)

Personal life and acting credits

• "Olsen stated" sounds off and the grammar tool I'm using marks it as an error - reword?
  • I changed the phrasing to neutrally state that she has been an atheist since the quote already lets readers know that she made a statement about it. KyleJoan^talk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
• Change "Girl In Car" to simply "Girl in car" per MoS.

 Done Chompy Ace 02:03, 28 May 2021 (UTC)

• Other than that, the one-paragraph sentence and the filmography table look good.

Awards and nominations

• WP:SMALLTEXT says the text font should not be made small in tables. For accessibility purposes, I suggest making the small notes actual notes.
  •  Done KyleJoan^talk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)

References

• All 92/92 sources are archived.
• #20 is missing an author.
  • The Daily Telegraph ref does not list an author. Maybe I'm missing it? KyleJoan^talk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
    •  Done Yep, I missed it. I was looking at an archived link that did not contain the author's name. Sorry about that! KyleJoan^talk 02:47, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
• #23, #68, #74, and #76 are missing access-dates.
  •  Done KyleJoan^talk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
• Links to Vulture should go to Vulture (website) per WP:NOTBROKEN.

 Done Chompy Ace 01:59, 28 May 2021 (UTC)

Progress

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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