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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 03:27, 7 December 2021 (UTC)Reply

Hello, I will be reviewing this article tonight--12george1 (talk) 03:27, 7 December 2021 (UTC)Reply

  • "for three days as a Category 5 hurricane," - You should do what you did in the Background section and wikilink Category 5 to the Saffir-Simpson scale
  • "Hurricane watches and warnings were issued along the Carolinan coast." - It should be spelled "Carolinian"
  • "Along the Carolinan coast, 25 tornadoes were reported, with most being weak and short-lived." - Ditto. Also, I've seen the list of tornadoes spawned by Dorian and some were as far west as Johnston County, NC, which is more than 50 miles from the Atlantic Ocean or the Albemarle and Pamlico sounds, though most weren't too far from the coast. Perhaps a contrasting word should also be added because I think most of them being weak and short-lived is rather unexpected. So instead, maybe say something like "Dorian spawned 25 tornadoes, with many near the Carolinian coast, although most were weak and short-lived."
  • "However, two longer-lived, EF2 strength tornadoes caused more significant damage than most of the other tornadoes in Sunset Beach and Emerald Island, with the EF2 tornadoes causing at least $2 million in property damage." - I think this should be re-written as "While few of these tornadoes resulted in significant impact, two longer-lived, EF2 strength tornadoes in North Carolina caused at least $2 million in property damage in Sunset Beach and Emerald Island."
  • "The highest gust, 96 kn (110 mph; 178 km/h)" - Knots usually aren't used in tropical cyclone-related articles, but I'm not remembering where that discussion took place or if it even exists. Maybe I'll let this slide
  • Yeah. We generally don't use knots in articles. And even when we do, it should not take precedence over the other units.   Fixed. LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 20:51, 7 December 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • "and became a hurricane north of the Greater Antilles on August 28." - It was east of Puerto Rico, which is at the eastern edge of the Greater Antilles. Maybe just say it was near Puerto Rico?
  • "which had cars driving westbound on east bound lanes," - eastbound should be one word like westbound
  • I'm seeing some inconsistencies with how highways are spelled out. For example, the South Carolina preparations has "I-26" twice, but in North Carolina's preparations and impact sections, Interstate 40 is spelled out twice. Same with a few of the state and US highways, like US 278 vs. U.S. Route 17 vs. Highway 117. I'm not sure if there's a right or wrong way to mention a highway, but it should be consistent.
  •   Fixed. Changed most of them to "Interstate" or "Route" to make them more consistent, largely matching their article titles. I kept "Highway" for the ones that did have "Highway" in their article titles. LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 20:51, 7 December 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • "Beaufort County enforced a curfew from 10:00 P.M. on September 4, 2019, to 6:00 A.M. on September 5, 2019." - If you're going to use local times, make sure to mention and wikilink EDT.
  • "Voting was also impacted in the 3rd congressional district. Ultimately, early voting hours were extended in every county of the 3rd congressional district and four counties in the 9th congressional district. The date to submit absentee ballots was prolonged. One polling place in Tyrrell County was relocated, as the original polling station was utilized as a command post for emergency relief efforts.[68]" - Given that 2019 was an odd numbered year, these elections were both special congressional elections. They both have articles. So I would wikilink 2019 North Carolina's 3rd congressional district special election and 2019 North Carolina's 9th congressional district special election somewhere in there.
  • "While a woman was eating a cheesecake on her bed" - I'm not sure if this type of detail should be mentioned in the article. In fact, that whole sentence might be not necessary unless maybe the tree injured or killed her. With 248,000 customers losing power, there's probably thousands of stories about what people were doing when the power went out just in South Carolina.
  • "A study by College of Charleston completed on September 11" ---> "A study by the College of Charleston completed on September 11"
  • "248,000 customers of Dominion Energy lost power in the state." - Avoid starting a sentence with a number. Maybe say "Approximately 248,000" given that this is unlikely to be the exact number.
  • "In Drayton Hall, Dorian uprooted 30 trees" - This should be "At Drayton Hall" instead of "In Drayton Hall"
  • "In DeBordieu, storm surge was rushing through one neighborhood in the town." ---> "In DeBordieu, storm surge rushed through one neighborhood in the town."
  • "through only 3 of those were substantially impacted." ---> "though only 3 of those were substantially impacted."
  • "Pasquotank,[132] and Perquimans Counties,[133]" ---> "Pasquotank,[132] and Perquimans counties,[133]"
  • "Flash flooding at Elizabeth City State University flooded campus streets and inundated the interior entrances of several buildings." ---> "Flash flooding at Elizabeth City State University inundated campus streets and the interior entrances of several buildings."
  • "with the gage in Edenton reaching a maximum height" ---> "with the gauge in Edenton reaching a maximum height"
  • "by the governor Henry McMaster on September 1 and ordered the federal assistance to support emergency work and to help replacing the facilities that was damaged by the hurricane" ---> "by the governor Henry McMaster on September 1. President Trump also ordered federal assistance to support emergency work and help with the replacement of facilities that were damaged by the hurricane"
  • "The governor also planned to invest in $10,000,000 (2019 USD) in the Medical District of Charleston" - Why not just say $10 million?
  • "south of Daytona Beach, Florida after being displaced." - Comma after Florida
  • "Bohatch, Emily (September 3, 2019). "SC officials not evacuating prison before Hurricane Dorian despite mandatory order" - Switch the format to first name first to be consistent with other refs.
  • "William, Emily (September 11, 2019). "Charleston's tourism industry lost $58.6 million during Hurricane Dorian closures" - Ditto. Also, it should be "Williams", not "William"

That should be it from me, but I'll let others chime in like last time, if necessary. I checked and saw that many of the issues from the previous review had been fixed (some during the review, some afterwards). This article is in much better shape than back then, but it still needs some work--12george1 (talk) 03:27, 7 December 2021 (UTC)Reply

  • Comment: I have a Project to work on and Finals for my classes next week, so I'll probably be unable to dedicate significant attention to this GAN until December 18. I can probably address all of these issues soon after that. Requesting this GAN to be put   On hold until I'm done with my Finals. I fully intend to bring this article to GA status afterward. LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 19:42, 7 December 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Actually, I decided to resolve all of the issues listed above, since none of them appeared to be that complicated. However, I am short on time until the end of my Finals Week, so I won't have much time to address any further concerns until December 18. LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 20:51, 7 December 2021 (UTC)Reply

I am going to pass this article now. Good work--12george1 (talk) 21:43, 14 December 2021 (UTC)Reply

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