Talk:Edwin Flack/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:47, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments

• Lead is a little slim for an article of this size.
• Would add non-breaking spaces between 800/1500 and metres throughout. --I never understood non-breaking spaces very well. I think I did as requested but not sure.
• No need to link common terms like "accountancy".  Done
• "Davey, Flack & Co.[4][2]" order those refs.  Done
• Avoid single-sentence paras.  Done except for when I felt the previous paragraphs were unrelated
• " middle distance and distance running " do you mean "long" there, i.e. "middle and long distance running"?  Done
• No need to capitalise C in colonies.  Done
• "was 2nd in" second.  Done
• "A keen athlete in Victoria," I think given the preceding paragraphs, this doesn't need to be stated.  Done
• "intent on attending the coming inaugural Olympics while in the city of New York" I don't understand this.  Done
• "880 yards (804.67m)" these conversions are not necessary (and not done the first time round in any case).  Done
• "W Bennett " -> "W. Bennett"  Done
• ", in the marathon, " with rather than in.  Done
• " Olympics He lost in" missing full stop.  Done
• " Australian postage stamp in " postage stamp is an easter egg link. -- Link removed
• Avoid SHOUTING in ref titles.  Done
• Avoid spaced hyphens in ref titles, they should be spaced en-dashes.  Done
• Ext link, spell out what ADB means.  Done
• Could add "people from Islington" as a category.  Done

That's it for a first run. I'll put it on hold while we go over the details. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:51, 2 April 2020 (UTC)

The changes you've made are great. The lead is still too slim though. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 07:57, 3 April 2020 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: How does it look now? Dat Guy^Talk_Contribs 17:16, 3 April 2020 (UTC)