Talk:Edward Millen/GA1
Latest comment: 12 years ago by Coemgenus in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Coemgenus (talk) 13:12, 13 August 2011 (UTC) Looks very good, but I have a few comments:
Early life edit
- You might want to link or explain "land agent".
- Exactly what sort of land reform did Millen espouse? The link doesn't help much.
State politics edit
- Maybe some brief explanation of Australian federation would be useful to non-Australians in understanding the politics of the era. Just a sentence or two, nothing too elaborate.
- "...elected in the second position" Are these multi-member districts? Some explanation, again, would help the non-Australian.
Minister for Repatriation edit
- You might want to explain the job of the Minister for Repatriation. Was it just about demobilization, or did he deal with veterans afterward, too?
I'll get to the rest of these on the weekend. Frickeg (talk) 12:16, 24 August 2011 (UTC)
- OK. I probably won't be able to review them until then, anyway. --Coemgenus (talk) 12:53, 24 August 2011 (UTC)
Other issues edit
- These changes are all good. I'm a little concerned about how closely the "Early life" section follows the Rutledge article -- some of the sentences are very close to the source. I understand that there's going to be some overlap in a chronological history -- things happened in that order, no matter how they're sourced -- but a little re-arranging might help. --Coemgenus (talk) 15:54, 28 August 2011 (UTC)