Talk:Eat You Up (BoA song)/GA1

GA Review

Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 22:43, 31 March 2016 (UTC)

Hello, I am Carbrera, and I'll be reviewing this article for possible good article submission.

Full review coming very soon. Carbrera (talk) 22:43, 31 March 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

• The single cover image requires an alt
• You can remove the caption because it is the unanimous cover for the physical and digital releases
• Please remove "Chart position", "Reviews", and "Miscellaneous" from the infobox

Lead

Paragraph 1

• "It premiered" → "It was released"

Paragraph 2

• "song's commercial appeal. Critics also felt it..." → "song's commercial appeals; they also felt it..."
• If the song was on the chart for 12 straight weeks, could you add "consecutive" before 12?

Paragraph 3

• "were directed for the single;" → "were created for the single;"
• Can you rephrase the last sentence in this paragraph?

Background and composition

Paragraph 1

• Instead of "On September 10," could you say "Two days later"?

Paragraph 2

• The first 'p' in 'Pop music' should be lowercased
• "The use of drum machines were overlapped..." → "The use of drums machines was overlapped..."

Critical reception

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• Italicize "AllMusic" please
• "song. Sullivan highlighted..." → "song; Sullivan highlighted..."
• Italicize "Idolator" please
• "positive in their review. They commended the..." → "positive in their review; they commended the..."

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• Instead of using just "Greg", you said user "A reviewer" since "Greg" is just so informal
• "in his review. He commended the..." → "in his review; he commended the..."
• In the above comment, you could also use "praised" instead of "commended"
• Instead of "&" you should say "and"
• Remove the link to "Asian Junkie"; it's unnecessary

Accolades

• Put quotation marks around "21 Greatest K-Pop Songs of All Time List"; capitalized 'songs' as wel

Commercial response

• Reword to "The single charted on US Dance Club Songs chart; it debuted at number 42 and peaked at number 27 for the week ending December 27, 2008."

Music videos

• "plan" → "planned"
• The rest is great!

Promotion and legacy

Paragraph 2

• Reword the first sentence please; it's a bit confusing

Paragraph 3

• In the final sentence, change "label" to "labelled"

Track list

• Rename section to "Track listing"

Credits and personnel

• You could columnize this so it's more compacy

End of GA Review:

Great job! Per standard procedure, I shall place on hold for seven days. Great job as always! Carbrera (talk) 03:28, 3 April 2016 (UTC)

@Carbrera: Done and dusted! :) CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 03:29, 4 April 2016 (UTC)