Talk:East Bengal Ultras/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 12:40, 30 December 2019 (UTC)

I'll pick this one up. Kosack (talk) 12:40, 30 December 2019 (UTC)

Lead

• The lead is rather short, consisting of just two sentences. I would say we should be looking for around two paragraphs given the size of the article.

Support

• Section is completely unsourced.
• Links are needed for East Bengal F.C. and IFA Shield.

Initial Days: 2013-2016

• What is reference two doing? Also, the name doesn't need bolding at this point.
• "They made the right noise by their first big Tifo", this doesn't remake sense.
• Sourcing is again an issue here.

Growth of Ultras Culture: 2017-present

• No need for words like atmosphere and youth derbies to be capitalised.

Chants and Slogans

• I'm not sure what use foreign language quotes are, especially when they're not even attributed.

Recognition

• Don't disguise external links as wikilinks.
• This section seems to be just an indiscriminate list, almost like promotional content.

References

• Don't use shouting in ref titles, per WP:ALLCAPS.

Unfortunately, I'll be failing this review as the article is some way off meeting the GA criteria. There are large portions of unsourced information and I have concerns over the WP:NPOV of the page. Phrases like "East Bengal Ultras has helped to amass all the fan clubs under one roof and raises the decibel level together from the stands" and "This was the perfect opportunity for a non-Indian football fan to get the hype and the passion surrounding the beautiful game in India" which are prevalent throughout sound more like a promotion for the group rather than an encyclopedia page.

Grammar is an issue as well, I would suggest submitting the article for a copyedit by a member of the WP:GOCE. On top of the few issues I included above, there is too much work to be reasonably managed in a single review. Kosack (talk) 12:52, 30 December 2019 (UTC)