Talk:Duffy Lewis/GA1

Latest comment: 2 years ago by GhostRiver in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 19:18, 3 January 2022 (UTC)Reply


Hello! I'll be taking a look at this article for the January 2022 GAN backlog drive. If you haven't already signed up, please feel free to join in! Although QPQ is not required, if you're feeling generous, I also have a list of GA nominations of my own right here.

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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

Infobox and lede

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Early life

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  • Good

Playing career

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Early career

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Boston Red Sox

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  • "Along with Tris Speaker as the center fielder and Harry Hooper as the right fielder," → "Along with center fielder Tris Speaker and right fielder Harry Hooper"
  • "during Ruth's major league career" → "during the latter's major league career"
  • "Game 3 and Game 4" → "in both Games 3 and 4"
  • Link San Francisco Bay Area
  • "Red Sox' manager" → "Boston manager"

Later playing career

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  • "Lewis with Dutch Leonard and Ernie Shore to" → "Lewis, along with Dutch Leonard and Ernie Shore, to"
  • No comma after "He began to lose playing time in 1920"
  • "He serves as" → "He served as"
  • "performance of the team" → "team's performance"

Career retrospective

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Duffy's Cliff

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  • Good

Later career

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  • The jump from the '29 market crash to coaching in '31 seems a little tenuous – any way to elaborate on what happened as an immediate result of the crash?
    • The hint that I goofed is that the sentence on the '29 market crash was cited with the article written by Tim Murnane in 1912. Oops. The SABR bio makes the connection of losing his nestegg in the market crash and returning to baseball to make money, and this article from 1967 does as well. – Muboshgu (talk) 03:45, 7 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

Later life

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  • I wouldn't mention his wife's death until after their relocation to Salem; it comes as a little bit of a shock that she dies at the end of one paragraph but is alive in the next

References

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  • Good

General comments

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  • Images are all public domain and relevant
  • No stability concerns in the revision history
  • Earwig score looks good, highest result falls along WP:LIMITED lines.

Putting on hold to allow nominator to address comments. Please feel free to ping me with questions, and let me know when you're finished! — GhostRiver 20:43, 4 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

@GhostRiver:, I believe I've addressed everything. – Muboshgu (talk) 21:07, 10 January 2022 (UTC)Reply
Thank you for making those changes, particularly the more substantial ones! Passing now! — GhostRiver 22:41, 10 January 2022 (UTC)Reply