Talk:Dual-threat quarterback/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Soulbust (talk · contribs) 23:30, 29 December 2023 (UTC)

Reviewer: Kimikel (talk · contribs)
Hello, I'm going to be doing this review as part of the July GA backlog drive. It should take me no longer than a week. Kimikel (talk) 03:32, 20 July 2024 (UTC)

• @Soulbust: Below is the first half of my review. I'm going to go through the sources tomorrow. If you think you can address all of these issues within the next 7 days or so let me know; if not, I'll close the review, and you can leave a message on my talk page whenever they are finished, and I promise I'll do a second review. Regardless, just let me know what you think, or if you have any questions - Kimikel (talk) 23:03, 25 July 2024 (UTC)
  • Also just let me know if you need more time. Kimikel (talk) 23:12, 25 July 2024 (UTC)

Well-written

Lead section

• The main issue with the lead section is that it contains a lot of information that is not cited or mentioned anywhere else in the article. Almost the entire second paragraph of the lead is completely unrelated to anything else in the article, as the article pretty much only talks about NFL QBs and not college QBs. You ought to go through and either remove everything from the lead that isn't in the actual article or add all of them into the article itself.

Over the next few days, I will see what I find (or if I can find) information regarding Dual-threats in college and in the CFL. If I can't find anything perhaps we should maybe rename this article as "Dual-threat quarterbacks in the NFL" and have Dual-threat quarterback be a more broad article akin to Game manager or System quarterback, or perhaps as a redirect to Quarterback#Dual-threat quarterbacks. Though, given the topic I think I will be able to find information regarding dual-threats in college/the CFL. Soulbust (talk) 01:39, 27 July 2024 (UTC)

Pre-modern era

• "as such the" > as such, the
• "if not more likely"> if not more, likely
• "However, they would" > They would
• "as coaches adopted new strategies to take advantage of players with unique physical attributes and skills — all in the name of trying to gain an edge on their opponents." > I feel as though this quote is not necessary and this info could be summarized.

 Done the first 4 bullets have been addressed. I tweaked the quote to be more summarizing in nature. Soulbust (talk) 23:20, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

• "As a result, quarterbacks..." > needs citation

Early history

• "The next decade, however," > The next decade
• "Tarkenton adds by describing the reaction to his scrambling at the time, "It was not a skill set that was embraced. Plenty of people mocked it, and the rest wrote it off."" > Tarkenton described scrambling as "not a skill set that was embraced. Plenty of people mocked it, and the rest wrote it off.
• "—in which he became the first quarterback to pass for over 2,000 yards and rush for over 500 yards in the same season—"> replace dashes with commas
• "as he logged" > logging
• "wild schemes, before" > unusual schemes for him before
• "leading to his" > which led to his
• "539 yards, on a team" > 539 yards
• "which was held" > which stood

 Done Except for 539 yards bullet. the ", on a team" section is necessary here since it is referring to how the Patriots team itself also set a record. Unless you would suggest for that to be removed. Soulbust (talk) 23:26, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

@Soulbust My mistake, for that one I just meant to remove the comma so it read "539 yards on a team", sorry Kimikel (talk) 01:46, 27 July 2024 (UTC)

Ah gotcha. Fixed that one now then. Soulbust (talk) 02:15, 27 July 2024 (UTC)

Increased frequency

• "writes that, although," > wrote that although
• "by a QB but make no mistake about it, if you are" > by a QB...if you are
• "adding that, Young," > adding that Young
• "writes, "True, Steve Young" > wrote that "Steve Young
• "in which Griffin III would" > who would
• " plays -- not" plays—not
• "Kordell Stewart," > remove comma
• "5 Super Bowls" > five Super Bowls

 Done Though I tweaked the CraveOnline quote about Young beyond your suggestions. I think it has a bit of a better flow this way, but let me know. Soulbust (talk) 23:35, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

Michael Vick effect

• "John Elway" > Elway
• "McNabb became joined" > McNabb joined
• "as Ray Buchanan stated" > with Ray Buchanan stating
• mobile right now," > mobile right now";
• "Michael Vick, and in addition to that, McNabb also mentored Vick" Michael Vick; he also mentored Vick
• "Vick also served" > Vick served
• "by Atlanta Falcons" > by the Atlanta Falcons

 Done and I did some extra tweaking to McNabb's quote/response to Buchanan. Also did tweaking on his connection to Vick Soulbust (talk) 23:43, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

Newfound implementations

• "labeled, "symbolic" > labeled "symbolic
• "This status came" > This came

 Done Soulbust (talk) 23:45, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

Introduction of RPO

• "have continued to rise" > continued to rise
• combine last two paragraphs, as they're both pretty small by themselves.

 Done Soulbust (talk) 23:47, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

Criticism

• See Wikipedia:Criticism, I think this section should be rolled into the previous one, with a header like "Racial connotation"
• "quarterbacks while still" > quarterbacks, while still

Broad

• This article is very NFL-centric and doesn't really make any reference to dual threat QBs at the college level, or in the CFL.

Neutral

• No issues with neutrality

Images

• Images fine

Stable

• Stable

Verifiable: Source spotcheck

1. 22: Verified for the Ravens record. However, none of the Grogan career stuff is mentioned in here, so all of the facts about Grogan are unsourced. New source should be introduced here that corroborates the facts about Grogan.
2. 30: Verified
3. 58: Verified
4. 70: Verified
5. 84: Verified

• 2, 25, 73 missing author