Talk:Dryopithecus/GA1

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Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 23:42, 15 January 2020 (UTC)

Will start soon. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 23:42, 15 January 2020 (UTC)

• and males had longer canines than females, which is typically correlated with high levels of aggression – maybe link "aggression" to Agonistic behaviour (this is what the source says?) to put it into a biological context?

done   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  06:56, 17 January 2020 (UTC)

• Lead: They lived in a seasonal climate – more important categories of climate are "subtropical", "humid warm" etc.; can something like this be added here?

added   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  06:56, 17 January 2020 (UTC)

• The first Dryopithecus fossils were first described – "First described" is technically correct, but I think you can spare one of the "first" here, as later finds cannot be "first described" anymore anyways.

fixed   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  06:56, 17 January 2020 (UTC)

• Darwin briefly notes – "noted" to be consistent with tense?

done   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  06:56, 17 January 2020 (UTC)

• with new specimens immediately being the basis of a new species or genus – "Immediately" seems too strong, descriptions usually take some time at least. Maybe "with new specimens leading to the erection of new species or genera"?

done   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  06:56, 17 January 2020 (UTC)

• resulting in several erroneous species – "erroneous" is judgemental, even Nomen dubia or Nomen nuda cannot be considered "erroneous" in my opinion. Maybe choose instead "now defunct" or "poorly supported" or similar, or delete altogether since the first part of the sentence already said it all.

done   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  06:56, 17 January 2020 (UTC)

• Was Dryopithecus the first fossil great ape to be described? One gets this impression when reading that all fossil apes had been classified within Dryopithecidae.

I'll check   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  06:56, 17 January 2020 (UTC)

• Miocene Climatic Optimum – link?

I can do a redlink   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  06:56, 17 January 2020 (UTC)

• a quadrupedal method of locomotion – mode of locomotion

done   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  06:56, 17 January 2020 (UTC)

• implying suspensory behaviour to reach them. – Also in other occasions, I would use "indicating" or "suggesting", as "implication" is too definite imo.

done   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  06:56, 17 January 2020 (UTC)

• and the latter two, oak, beech, elm, and pine honey sources – but only for the insects (bees), not for the apes themselves? Reads as if the apes would feed on nectar.

That's why they were sources of honey (not nectar)   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  06:56, 17 January 2020 (UTC)

• Reads well, only minor nitpicks. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 09:17, 16 January 2020 (UTC)