Talk:Drag Is Magic/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Cavie78 in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Cavie78 (talk · contribs) 21:50, 23 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

I'll take this one Cavie78 (talk) 21:50, 23 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

Thanks! ---Another Believer (Talk) 00:19, 24 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

Lead

  • "The title track served as the EP's lead single; "Drag Is Magic" and "The Drag Alphabet" both received music videos" -> "Music videos were made for both the title track and "The Drag Alphabet", with the former serving as the EP's lead single."
  • You might want to link EP to Extended play
  • You should use the name of West's series rather - Drag Is Magic with Nina West - rather than just saying "her 2019 series for World of Wonder", particularly as it shares a name with the EP
  • Why do you have cites in the lead? Cites are nomrally only needed in the lead for direct quotes or to back up possibly contentious claims

Composition

  • It would be good to say something about the recording of the EP and any info about how West wrote the songs, but I guess there's nothing available?
    • I've searched and reviewed sourcing thoroughly. If there's detail here, it's hiding well. ---Another Believer (Talk) 00:19, 24 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

Promotion

  • "In June 2019, World of Wonder announced Drag Is Magic with Nina West" Could be because I'm a Brit, but I've never heard of World of Wonder, and the wiki page says they're a production company, so where did the series air? Is World of Wonder a channel or do they produce shows for other people?
    • Good question! I think the company produces series for various platforms, including television, online streaming, WOW Presents Plus, YouTube. I've clarified World of Wonder is a production company and WOW Presents Plus is a streaming service. Good idea, --Another Believer (Talk) 00:19, 24 May 2020 (UTC)Reply

Music videos

  • "By the end of the video, children" -> "By the end of the video, the children"? I assume you're talking about the four children from earlier? If not, make it clear
  • "community at her friend's request" -> "community at a friend's request"
  • "and Nina West (Andrew Levitt)" Maybe say "and Nina West (credited as Andrew Levitt)"?

Other

  • Images are appropriately licenced and sources look good
Not much to do with this one - good work @Another Believer:! Placing on for hold for now until my (minor) concerns are addressed Cavie78 (talk) 22:09, 23 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
Cavie78, Thanks! ---Another Believer (Talk) 00:19, 24 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
Good work Another Believer, happy to promote. Congrats! Cavie78 (talk) 10:30, 24 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
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