Talk:Don't Start Now/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Coolmarc in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Tomica (talk · contribs) 09:35, 28 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Lead
  • No issues found. The lead looks great!
Writing and production
  • basslines by the Bee Gees and Daft Punk ---> basslines used by the Bee Gees and Daft Punk
Reworded. CoolMarc 18:48, 28 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • he went through 25 different sounds and incorporated them to four ---> change to to into
Reworded. CoolMarc 18:48, 28 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
Music and lyrics
  • while the chorus follows a Bm–D–Em7–F♯m7–Gmaj7 sequence. ---> maybe change while to whilst? To follow BE rules since Dua is English.
Reworded. CoolMarc 18:48, 28 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
Release and promotion
  • No issues
Critical Reception
  • In the Los Angeles Times, ---> Maybe, In a review for Los Angeles Times or Writing for Los Angeles Times?
Reworded. CoolMarc 18:48, 28 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • musicOMH's Nick Smith described the track as a "Moloko-esque nu-disco treasure",[8] while Robin Murray of Clash called it "a super-infectious disco burner" with "a Chic flavour to the songwriting, given a chrome-plated 2019 overhaul."[48] ---> I feel that this sentence is better suited for Music and lyrics rather than Critical Reception.
I removed Clash, but kept musicOMH who called the song a "treasure" and the Moloko comparison I feel is valid since Lipa has said they influenced the album. CoolMarc 18:48, 28 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • The section contains too many quotations. Can you try to re-write them? I know that sometimes is tricky, but it would be nice if you can reduce them a bit.
I've done some more paraphrasing where possible, is it better now? Some of the quotes cannot paraphrased otherwise they risk misrepresenting the critics view. CoolMarc 18:48, 28 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
Commercial Performance
  • In January 2020, it was certified platinum by the British Phonographic Industry (BPI).[62] As of 17 April 2020, the song has sold 1,037,130 units in the UK.[63] ---> Try to combine these two sentences in one. They are too short by themselves and also related.
Combined and trimmed. CoolMarc 18:48, 28 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • On the Irish Singles Chart, "Don't Start Now" debuted at number one, becoming Lipa's fourth chart-topper in Ireland, following 2017's "New Rules" and "IDGAF", and 2018's "One Kiss". ---> IDGAF was released in 2018 as a single, so it's technically a 2018 single.
Corrected. CoolMarc 18:48, 28 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • It topped the chart for two consecutive weeks.[65] ---> Again, this sentence is too short to be on its own. Try to combine it.
Combined. CoolMarc 18:48, 28 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
Music video
  • No issues.
Live performances
  • Lipa performed the song in a red bodysuit at the 2019 American Music Awards on 24 November 2019. ---> maybe you can add that she wore a red suit in the follow-up sentence? It seems kinda trivial here.
Added to next sentence. CoolMarc 18:48, 28 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
References
  • They look really well organized.
Thank you! CoolMarc 18:48, 28 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

All in all, great work on the article. It's super ready to be a GA, and with few minor grammar tweaks even to FA. Once the issues are resolved I will promote it to GA. — Tom(T2ME) 17:35, 28 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

@Tomica: Thanks so much for your kind words and review!! I've responded above. CoolMarc 18:48, 28 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Awesome, thanks for the responses. I will be passing this to a GA status. Keep up the good work! — Tom(T2ME) 19:09, 28 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
Thank you again🙏 CoolMarc 19:36, 28 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
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