Talk:Don't Kill It

GA Review

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Reviewer: Slightlymad (talk · contribs) 11:09, 24 August 2017 (UTC)

Grabbing this for a review. SLIGHTLY^mad 11:09, 24 August 2017 (UTC)

• Infobox: Under Release date, specify the exact venues during the August 27 and September 26 premieres. The runtime is also unsourced; just cite the BBFC as a reference since it's considered reliable by MOS:FILM
• Plot: consider expanding this into a real plot summary; this requires watching the movie. Make sure it comports with WP:FILMPLOT.
• Development:The scripted film took place in Alaska, What do you mean by "scripted film"? I'm confused.
• Filming: Apparently, the city and public were very interested in the movie's production and the presence of Dolph Lundgren within their community. "Apparently" is WP:EDITORIALIZING
• Release: On March 3, 2017, the film was released in "select theaters" and made available through video on demand. What does quoting "select theaters" imply? I feel like this is WP:SCAREQUOTES. I would rephrased that clause into, "On March 3, 2017, the film had a limited theatrical release..."
• Critical reception: According to him, Don't Kill It "plays like a B-movie version of Fallen. Please provide a link for Fallen, and make sure it is the same stuff the reviewer was talking about.
• Home media: Expand this by adding reviews of the DVD/Blu-ray versions.
• Avoid use of contractions per MOS:N'T. I managed to fix some of them in the prose but I'm leaving the others for you to fix. If there are contractions in direct quotes, just leave them alone.
• Kindly double-check if the prose observes proper logical quotation.

Metal121, I'm giving you until September 1 to fix these concerns, even though such a long time won't be necessary. If these are not addressed on or before the prescribed date, I will have to fail this outright. SLIGHTLY^mad 12:35, 24 August 2017 (UTC)

Closing review after a week-long inactivity from the article. SLIGHTLY^mad 08:51, 30 August 2017 (UTC)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Don't Kill It/GA2. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:49, 2 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments

• "attached to direct for over three to four years" I'm afraid I'm not sure I understand that, and "over three to four years" is very odd phrasing.
• " budgeting concerns. The budget " quick repeat of budget is reptitive.
• "$1 million; with" no need for that semi-colon at all.
• "had one to two weeks notice." one-to-two
• "postponed on two separate occasions," -> "postponed twice"
• " in Hamburg, Germany on " comma after Germany.
• "at the Fantastic Fest film festival in" -> "at Fantastic Fest in"
• " March 3, 2017 via AMC Theatres.[1][2] " comma after 2017 and why is this the only place to use refs? No need assuming this info is in the article and referenced there.
• Plot is too long. Our MOS recommends between 400 and 700 words, this is currently at nearly 1000.
• "to "a happy accident."" ref quote and I don't understand what this means.
• "Mendez'" ->"Mendez's"
• "project.[11][10] " ref order.
• Quotes need referencing and when unclear, attribution too.
• " Jebediah Woodley; his debut in the horror movie" comma, not semi-colon.
• "Dolph Lundgren in 2015," image caption is fragment so no full stop required.
• " role "probably" 9–10 months" why "probably"? The lead doesn't say "probably"?
• "time, but "had it all down"; production " the first part of this is really unnecessary, one would imagine that all professional actors "have it down" before filming. The second part should be a sentence in its own right however, not another semi-colon run-on.
• "and "maybe a week or two" before " I don't think these kind of quotes are really necessary or enhancing the article. This could be "and about two weeks" in plain prose.
• "filming; at which point she was cast." no need for semi-colon.
• " at which point she was cast. This was due to all of the producers disagreeing on who they wanted to play the" odd order. The delay was because of a failure to agree, not the point at which she was cast.
• " December, 2015" no need for the comma.
• "in Lexington, Mississippi;[17][10] over " order, no need for semi-colon, it's a comma.
• "12 days to prep" " again, no quote necessary, just "12 days to prepare" in plain prose is fine.
• ""20 miles out." [N 3] " ref quote and no space before note.
• " helpful; and provided the production crew with access to different locations; including t" no need for either semi-colon, lose the first and replace the second with a comma.
• "Mendez on the filming of Don't Kill It.[11]" fragment, lose the full stop. Same for other box quote.
• "during which time " at which time, it's a single day.
• "would "launch sales" at the" another unnecessary quote.
• Could link Limited theatrical release.
• Avoid single-sentence paragraphs.
• "Richard Whittaker, of The Austin Chronicle" lose the comma.
• Use the {{'}} template for 's after words in italics to prevent the apostrophe crashing.
• "surface, Don’t Kill It has" italics for film title.
• "of 92%; based on " delete semi-colon.
• Again, avoid single-sentence paras.
• No need to link DIY, I think most readers understand it.
• Likewise Halloween.
• "Noel Murray, of the " remove comma. Several of these.
• " "enjoyable comedic wit"; although "nothing Oscar worthy, it carries Lundgren "a lot farther than you'd expect".[30]" lose the semi-colon and there's an odd number of quote marks here.
• "Distribution.[32][33][34][6][20]" five (out of order) citations really needed for this single sentence?

That's it for a first pass, so it's on hold. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 10:42, 3 April 2020 (UTC)

User:Metal121 I'll give this a week before failing it if no response is forthcoming. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 20:39, 5 April 2020 (UTC)

Failing due to lack of response. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 10:45, 10 April 2020 (UTC)