Talk:Dog Day Afternoon/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by GDuwen in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 19:34, 17 February 2021 (UTC) Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolinawanna talk? 19:34, 17 February 2021 (UTC)
Infobox edit
- The film poster needs a better rationale (I suggest using the poster rationale template).
- Done
- Move Thomas Moore to after P. F. Kluge with {{Based on|"The Boys in the Bank"|P. F. Kluge and Thomas Moore}} since they both wrote the article.
- Done
- Also, is his name Thomas Moore or Thomas Mooreen (as seen in #Pre-production)?
- The poster usually serves as a source for the infobox, but Victor J. Kemper isn't mentioned so he needs a reference.
- Kemper is mentioned a couple of times throughout the article: in the Production, Reception and Legacy sections. The story by Kluge and Moore is not mentioned in the poster either, but we have the mentions along the article.--GDuwenHoller! 20:45, 23 February 2021 (UTC)
- Running time needs a reference.
- Done
- It has already been established that the film was American so US$ isn't needed in the infobox.
- "US$3.5[1] to US$3.8 million[2]" → "$3.5–$3.8 million[1][2]"
- "US$50 million[3] to US$56 million[2]" → "$50–56 million[3][2]"
- So is "US$" going to be changed to just "$"?
Lead edit
- Remove the comma after "directed by Sidney Lumet".
- Done
- Remove the comma after "written by Frank Pierson".
- Done
- "Upon release" → "Upon theatrical release"
- Done
- Remove the comma after "Golden Globe awards".
- Done
- "seven [[Golden Globe Award|Golden Globe]] awards" → "seven [[Golden Globe Awards]]"
- Done
Plot and cast edit
- Both these sections look good.
Background edit
The robbery edit
- Link John Wojtowicz and Salvatore Naturile (in case a reader skips through to #Background and needs the links).
- Done
- Also link John F. Kennedy International Airport.
- Done
- "The requested" → "They requested"
- "They requested" → "They also requested"
- Done
- "After fourteen hours" → "After more than fourteen hours" or "After fifteen hours"
- Let's leave it at "After more than fourteen hours", all the sources I find really contradict themselves.--GDuwenHoller! 20:51, 23 February 2021 (UTC)
- A source is needed for the quote after "Aurichio recalled Eden told him".
Pre-production edit
- In the reference right after "their captors", the word "Boys" should be capitalized.
- The reference after "Serpico at the box office" needs a reference.
- Done
- "Serpico at the box office" → "Serpico (1973) at the box office" or "Serpico at the box office in 1973"
- Randy Wicker is not mentioned in this source.
- I think there's a rule on Wiki that says that every quote needs a reference right after the quotation marks so I would just cite the same source again after each "end-quote".
- I don't see anything wrong with the citation being at the end of the phrase. I could only find on Wikipedia:Quotations that citations have to be provided. Do you have any other link of the MoS? In my estimation, if the quote can be found on the cited website/newspaper/book, it should be enough.--GDuwenHoller! 21:11, 23 February 2021 (UTC)
- I think I found the rule at WP:UNSOURCED and WP:MINREF, which say to "attribute all quotations".
- I don't see anything wrong with the citation being at the end of the phrase. I could only find on Wikipedia:Quotations that citations have to be provided. Do you have any other link of the MoS? In my estimation, if the quote can be found on the cited website/newspaper/book, it should be enough.--GDuwenHoller! 21:11, 23 February 2021 (UTC)
- Change all quotation uses of "..." to "[...]", in this section and in #Production.
Production edit
- "bridges, beaches and neighborhoods" → "bridges, beaches, and neighborhoods"
- Remove the comma after "own clothes".
- "hotel those" → "hotel for those"
- "To amplify the effect in film" → "To amplify the effect in the film"
- Remove the comma after "lasted longer".
- Remove the comma after "centered on Pacino".
Release and reception edit
- "Village Voice" → "The Village Voice"
- "The Chicago Tribune" → "the Chicago Tribune"
- Don't put United Press International in italics since it's an agency.
- "Evening Sun" → "The Evening Sun"
- "Detroit Free Press" → "The Detroit Free Press"
- "The Miami Herald" → "The Miami Herald"
- "Atlanta Constitution" → "The Atlanta Constitution"
- "Montreal Gazette" → "The Montreal Gazette"
Lawsuits edit
- "her depiction on the film" → "her depiction in the film"
- "coauthor" → "a coauthor"
- "Wojtowicz filled" → "Wojtowicz filed"
Legacy edit
- "Vietnam war" → "Vietnam War"
- "Watergate scandal" → "the Watergate scandal"
- "two disc" → "two-disc"
- "tribute for Pierson's" → "tribute to Pierson's"
- Don't put Metacritic, Rotten Tomatoes, or AllMovie in italics.
- Update Rotten Tomatoes.
- "Allmovie" → "AllMovie"
- "San Francisco Chronicle" → "The San Francisco Chronicle"
In popular culture edit
- Remove the colon after including.
Accolades edit
- The nominee for the British Academy Film Award for Best Film should be for the film, not the director.
- What makes the Online Film & Television Association notable for the list (it doesn't look official)?
- Not sure what to make out of that award. I see it listed throughout Wikipedia (most of List of awards and nominations received by xx). I think though, it may be relevant enough. It appears in news pieces written the last few years, and a quick Google search reveals around 45,000 pages mentioning it.--GDuwenHoller! 21:02, 26 February 2021 (UTC)
- The nominee for the British Academy Film Award for Best Direction should be for the director, not the film.
References edit
- Link all websites.
- Link all authors (such as Arthur Bell).
- Archive all archivable sources.
- There is a reference with a typo ("Los Ageles Times"), so I would change it.
External links edit
- Remove the links to AllMovie, Box Office Mojo, and Rotten Tomatoes per WP:ELRC.
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