Talk:Dive profile/GA1

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Pbsouthwood in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Jclemens (talk · contribs) 04:56, 25 August 2016 (UTC)Reply


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1. Well-written:
  1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. Not the most engaging prose, but it's certainly generally technically correct and appropriately detailed.
* This may be difficult to improve, but I will bear it in mind. It is not a particularly entertaining subject. • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 14:21, 25 August 2016 (UTC)Reply
  1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. No see also section. Lead is possibly too short, and should probably summarize the various profiles and cover their use.
Fair comment, I will expand as suggested. • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 14:21, 25 August 2016 (UTC)Reply
* Lead has been expanded to mention named profile types and give a couple of examples.
* I have no strong feelings on "See also" sections, but when I checked MOS for the general policy I found As a general rule, the "See also" section should not repeat links that appear in the article's body or its navigation boxes, and there are already two navboxes with quite a good selection of relevant articles. A "See also" section would duplicate these, as I can't think of anything that should be in "See also" and shouldn't be in one of the navboxes. I will wait for your recommendations on this point. • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 15:41, 25 August 2016 (UTC)Reply
2. Verifiable with no original research:
  2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. What we have looks fine.
  2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). The second paragraph in Planning and monitoring decompression has two CN tags and zero actual citations. Records section is uncited.
* Citations added to all statements tagged.• • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 14:21, 25 August 2016 (UTC)Reply
  2c. it contains no original research. Nothing looks particularly problematic, but see above.
* All tagged statements now cited.• • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 14:21, 25 August 2016 (UTC)Reply
  2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism. None identified with Earwig's tool.
3. Broad in its coverage:
  3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. Fine.
  3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). Fine.
  4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. Appropriate.
  5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. Quite stable.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
  6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. All looking good.
  6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. Fine, but it wouldn't hurt to spice this otherwise dry article up with a picture of a dive computer and/or a log book entry.
Picture of dive computer easy enough, and done. My own logbook does not include graphics of dive profiles as it is a commercial logbook. I will add more if and when I find a suitable image. • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 12:44, 25 August 2016 (UTC)Reply
  7. Overall assessment. Passing per improvements.

First read-through edit

  • Other than the lead and citation needed tags, this meets criteria. It's certainly possible to spice up the prose and images, but the bulk of the GA criteria are met. It's going to be ON HOLD until those are addressed. Jclemens (talk) 05:17, 25 August 2016 (UTC)Reply
Jclemens, Thanks for reviewing, I will try to sort out the point above within the next few days. I do not foresee any problems. • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 12:44, 25 August 2016 (UTC)Reply
Thanks for your prompt attention to the feedback. It now meets GA criteria. Cheers, Jclemens (talk) 17:50, 25 August 2016 (UTC)Reply
Jclemens, Thank you for your efficient review, a pleasure to work with you. Cheers, • • • Peter (Southwood) (talk): 05:40, 26 August 2016 (UTC)Reply