Talk:Desperate Souls/GA1
Latest comment: 12 years ago by Gen. Quon in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 18:29, 22 April 2012 (UTC)
- Intro: link 'first season'
- Plot: 'Henry becomes worried when he finds out Mr. Gold is Emma's benefactor knowing how' Comma is needed after 'benefactor'
- Plot: 'They mock Rumpelstiltskin for running away when he was supposed to serve and reveals that his cowardice caused his wife to leave him.' 'reveal shouldn't have an s and I would add 'they' before it
Those are the only issues. On hold for seven days.--Gen. Quon (talk) 20:34, 27 April 2012 (UTC)
- I have edited the article per your suggestions (though I added a comma instead of "they" for your last comment). Thanks for the review! Ruby 2010/2013 02:20, 30 April 2012 (UTC)
- I pass!--Gen. Quon (talk) 03:43, 30 April 2012 (UTC)