Talk:Desert kite

GA Review

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Reviewer: Eviolite (talk · contribs) 04:53, 24 April 2022 (UTC)

I will be reviewing this article; if I do not get to it within ~36 hours please ping me. eviolite (talk) 04:53, 24 April 2022 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

   Passes spotchecks, at least from the sources I can access at present

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

   No obvious gaps

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   Picture is VRT-approved and clearly relevant.

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• Consider linking North Africa, Central Asia, and Arabia

  Done. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 14:45, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

• "6000 known such structures" seems awkward to me, maybe just "6,000 known desert kites"

  Done. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 14:45, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

• "meters"/(kilo)"metres", be consistent

  Done. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 14:45, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

• link gazelle, maybe

  Done. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 14:45, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

Appearance and occurrence

• "made up by" seems odd, maybe something like "composed of"
• It might be clear if you explicitly said "linear piles of stones"
• The dimensions mentioned are for the kites, not the piles, right? For clarity I'd recommend splitting the measurements into another sentence

  Done to here. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 14:45, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

• What does "accounting of erosion" include in this case?

  That the piles weren't much higher before erosion. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 14:45, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

• ", or even lines formed by" - maybe "or the result of lines formed by"
• Commas around and "but in one common structure"
• "a structure consisting of" is redundant

  Done to here. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 14:45, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

• What are these "attached cells"?

  Places where the wall is bent outward, akin to the letter omega. Not sure how to formulate it. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 14:45, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

• "which are interpreted as" - "which have been interpreted as"
• If much larger and smaller sizes are also known, is the 10k sq m just an average then? If so that should be noted.
• Add comma after "were eroded or submerged"
• "although they occur at their margins" - I may be wrong but I think the source is saying they occur at the margins of mountains regions rather than that of endorheic basins, so should be clarified

  Done to here. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 14:45, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

• what does "open" terrain refer to?

  Lack of vegetation and rocks. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 14:45, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

• What is a "slope break"?

  Where a slope changes. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 14:45, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

• "Humid climate" is a dab page

  Can't do anything about this, sorry. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 14:45, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

• "are known from Europe" - given the structure of this sentence, change to "have been found in Europe"
• "Mesolithic-Neolithic age" - maybe "the Mesolithic and Neolithic ages"?
• Consider rewording " in North America structures used into the 19th century AD known as drive lines," to something like "North America, where structures known as drive lines have been used into the 19th century AD,"
• I don't think drive line is linking to the correct article

  Done to here. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 14:45, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

Function

• "are traps" - "were used as traps", maybe
• remove "just" in "just linear structures", sounds like editorializing

  Done to here. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 14:45, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

• What is this "significant impact on wild animals"? If there are no details I'd recommend removing the sentence.

  Source doesn't specify. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 14:45, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

Research history

• "either" in "interpreted either as" is redundant
• I assume a toy kite is just a kite, so change that to avoid the redlink.
• "are" -> "include" in "research are what"

  Done to here. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 14:45, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

  @Jo-Jo Eumerus: Thanks! I've done some minor copyediting as I said on a second pass; of course, feel free to change them back if you find them to be incorrect or unhelpful, but I am happy to promote this to GA now. Great work! eviolite (talk) 15:09, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

@Jo-Jo Eumerus: See my comments above for a first pass; I might go through and do minor copyedits later as well. eviolite (talk) 14:24, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

Did you know nomination

The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by SL93 (talk) 06:26, 10 May 2022 (UTC)

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• Comment or view
• Article history

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• ... that desert kites in the Middle East and North Africa were used as traps for wild game? Source:

Improved to Good Article status by Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk). Nominated by Cranloa12n (talk) at 16:25, 30 April 2022 (UTC).

• Article has achieved Good Article status. No issues of copyvio or plagiarism. All sources appear reliable. Hook is interesting and sourced. QPQ is not needed as this is one of the first five nominations. Looks ready to go. Congratulations on this excellent article! Thriley (talk) 01:54, 10 May 2022 (UTC)

References

Israel v. Palestine?

What is the preferred terminology if you are only talking about the region? I know nothing about whatever consensus there might already be in this wiki-war zone. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 11:33, 18 November 2022 (UTC)

Usually mention both. But are there actually any kites in the State of Palestine? – Joe (talk) 12:58, 18 November 2022 (UTC)

Based on the map here it seems like there is one kite in the West Bank. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 13:09, 18 November 2022 (UTC)

Aha. That would be Ein Gedi, I think. Well spotted. – Joe (talk) 16:00, 18 November 2022 (UTC)

Recent addition

Thanks for the addition, but this addition needs some work. Proseline is generally considered a bad style; the new information ideally should be integrated in the existing text, not dropped in as an unrelated paragraph. That and the citation format isn't congruent with the rest of the article. Putting this here as a comment largely because myself I prefer to update articles only at the end of the year, especially if the information in question is of the "breaking news" variety that is often clarified or debunked later. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 08:54, 30 May 2023 (UTC)

We should also point out (as the authors of the paper do) that this is not the first known depiction of a kite in rock art. The extremely precise part is what's new. – Joe (talk) 12:17, 30 May 2023 (UTC)

My bad, apologies for a poor addition. Euor (talk) 16:35, 30 May 2023 (UTC)

I've rewritten the addition. It wasn't so much a "poor addition" and mainly needed some format rewrite. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 07:20, 31 May 2023 (UTC)

Thank you. I just stumbled over the news, skimmed the article, then figured I'd add the information on an impulse. But I should have paid more attention to format and so on, as I see this article has been given much care and attention. Wish you a good day.--Euor (talk) 19:29, 31 May 2023 (UTC)