Talk:Dental treatment modalities for adults with disabilities
Latest comment: 3 years ago by Dodger67 in topic The title is really horrible
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Dental Treatment modalities for adults with Special Needs edit
The_Boss_With_The_Floss This is such excellent work! I have a few recommendations, mostly about tone and phrasing.
- In the lead, I would remove the sentence that starts with "It also challenges any particular industry..." because the lead should focus on the specific topic, not generalizations about other industries
- I would rephrase the last sentence "This article will..." to remove "this article" language and have it describe different aspects of Dental Treatment Modalities. Describe the different elements that go into what make up these different treatment modalities. All the content is there, it's just not about the article, it's about the modalities themselves
- Is there a sentence you can add to the list of "Special Needs Conditions" to tie it specifically to the Dental Treatment Modalities. Ex. are these the most common conditions? Are they certified on a list? Are there specific modalities that correspond to each condition? As it stands, this section to belong in a lot of different articles. Tying it to something specific to this article indicates it's in the right spot
- The challenges section is fantastic
- Same with the Modalities section. This is really outstanding work right here!
Will (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:18, 31 August 2020 (UTC)
The title is really horrible edit
I'm coming to this article from a disability rights POV. The phrase "special needs conditions" is probably the cringiest "euphemism" for disability I've seen in a very long time. It's practically a "perfect storm" of everything that is wrong with overblown political correctness. Please, I'm begging you, please, change it to "...adults with disabilities". The WikiProject Disability style guide is worth a look, as is the special needs article. Roger (Dodger67) (talk) 22:13, 2 September 2020 (UTC)
- Having taken another more thorough look at this article, I have to completely disagree with the above opinion. This article is a low quality duplication of part of the content of Special needs dentistry. Consequently I have decided to redirect it there. Roger (Dodger67) (talk) 14:04, 30 October 2020 (UTC)