Talk:Democratic Party (Serbia)/GA1
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Reviewer: MovieTalk101178 (talk · contribs) 19:33, 10 March 2024 (UTC)
Hello, I'll review this article for GA status over the coming week, most likely next weekend. I hope to learn some new information. :) Thank you for nominating it! MovieTalk101178 (talk) 19:33, 10 March 2024 (UTC)
- I'll take a look at this throughout the next week! Thank you for reviewing this article. Vacant0 (talk) 21:25, 31 March 2024 (UTC)
- @MovieTalk101178: All done. Vacant0 (talk) 12:16, 7 April 2024 (UTC)
- Thank you for the revisions! They all look good. I'm promoting to GA. :) Really great job on this one! MovieTalk101178 (talk) 14:09, 10 April 2024 (UTC)
- @MovieTalk101178: All done. Vacant0 (talk) 12:16, 7 April 2024 (UTC)
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Overall comments
editThank you for nominating the article Vacant0! First of all, I'm sorry this review has taken so long, and I have to commend you for this article because this is not an easy article to write. I made a few copy edits as I went through the article. Please feel free to revert if you disagree with them. :) I listed some of them below but not all.
Lead section and infobox
editAfter Zoran Đinđić's election as president of DS in 1994, DS was reorganised, he led the party into the Together coalition, and took part in the 1996–1997 protests, which occurred after the Electoral Commission invalidated local election results in cities in which the Together coalition had won.
– This sentence was a little strange to me so I changed to: “After Zoran Đinđić's election as president of DS in 1994, DS was reorganised. Đinđić led the party into the Together coalition, and DS took part in the 1996–1997 protests that occurred after the Electoral Commission invalidated local election results in cities in which the Together coalition had won.”Done Okay, sounds good.
1990–1993: the Mićunović years
editThe protests resulted into the release of SPO leader Vuk Drašković
– I recommend changing to “As a result of the protests, SPO leader Vuk Drašković was let go, and the RTS director resigned.Done
After leaving DS, he formed the Democratic Party of Serbia (DSS), along with Mirko Petrović, Draško Petrović, and Vladan Batić.
– I suggest revising to “After leaving DS, he partnered with Mirko Petrović, Draško Petrović, and Vladan Batić” and formed the Democratic Party of Serbia (DSS)Done
Đinđić invited several entrepreneurs to join DS during this period, which earned DS the nickname "yellow company" from its opponents.
– There are quite a few sentences in this section with dependent clauses “,which…” so to change it up a bit, I suggest revisng to
“Đinđić invited several entrepreneurs to join DS during this period and DS was dubbed the "yellow company" by its opponents.”
Done
Yellow being one of the official DS colours and the colour of Centromarket, a company owned by Slobodan Radulović, one of the entrepreneurs.
– I would change to “Yellow was both an official color of DS and the color of Centromarket, a company owned by Slobodan Radulović, one of the entrepreneurs invited to join the party.Done
2001–2004: Post-Milošević period
editDS nominated Labus, then the leader of a citizens' group, in the presidential election that was organised for September 2002.
– I suggest revising to “DS nominated Labus – who, at the time, was the leader of a citizen’s group - in the presidential election that was organised for September 2002.”Done
In the December 2002 election, DS initially stated that it could support Koštunica
– Perhaps change to “DS initially stated its intent to support Koštunica but DSS declined their support”Done
2005–2012: the Tadić years
editŽivković criticised the measure to award Tadić the title of an honorary president, which he described as a "rotten compromise between Đilas and Tadić", leading to him leaving DS.
– How about changing to “Živković criticised the measure to award Tadić the honorary presidential title and described it as a "rotten compromise between Đilas and Tadić." This led to his departure from DS.”?Done
2013–2017: Internal crisis
editTadić was accused of being the inspirer of the dismissal of Đilas and he planned to return to the post of the president of DS, which resulted the conflict between Đilas and Tadić to become more evident, which resulted the conflict between Đilas and Tadić to become more evident.
– This sentence is a little unclear. Maybe the sentences will work work better if phrased as “Tadić was accused of conspiring against Đilas in a bid to return to the post of president of DS, and the accusations called attention to the conflict between Đilas and Tadić.”Done
2018–present: the Lutovac years
editManojlović resigned as vice-president of DS after being revealed that she was not featured on the SPN electoral list for the parliamentary elections.
– Perhaps change to
“Manojlović resigned as vice-president of DS when her name was absent from the SPN electoral list for the parliamentary elections.”
Done
Tadić era
editDS also advocated improving the standard of living and a balanced regional development
– I revised to “advocated for the improvement of the standard of living and for a balanced regional development.” Please feel free to revert if you disagree.Done Sounds good
Post-Tadić era
editAs of May 2023, DS has been described as being on the centre-left of the political spectrum.
– The article uses “as of May 2023” a few times so I suggest changing to “In recent years” or rephrase to "In recent years, DS has been described as a centre-left party."Done "Recent" is a word that should be refrained from usage in encyclopedic articles but I've changed the sentence anyway.
Organisation
editby 2013, it reported having 196,673 members.
– I recommend changing to “by 2023, the number had increased to 196,673.Done
As of May 2023, ten political parties, this being the DC, DSS, now known as the New Democratic Party of Serbia,[1] G17+, LDP, Nova, NDS, LS, SLS, SDS, and ZZS, were formed as splits from DS.
– This sentence feels a little clunky. Might be beneficial to revise to: “As of May 2023, ten political parties have been formed as splits from DS: DC, DSS, now known as the New Democratic Party of Serbia,[1] G17+, LDP, Nova, NDS, LS, SLS, SDS, and ZZS.”Done
Electoral performance
editGraphs are unavailable due to technical issues. There is more info on Phabricator and on MediaWiki.org.
- There are two unavailable graphs (parliamentary elections and federal parliamentary elections). Do you know if this message refers to the red/green government vs. opposition graphs in the article or something else?- This is not related to the red/green bar below but a bar chart template that has been unavailable for a year now I think.
References and images
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