Talk:Delhi Metro/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Arsenikk ^(talk) 12:35, 11 October 2010 (UTC)

Comments

• Infobox: it should be 'National Capital Region, India' not 'National Capital Region (India)' (pipe the link)
• Leave out the 'http://' in the web site, use the format [http://www.delhimetrorail.com www.delhimetrorail.com]; it looks a lot more aesthetic.
• Concerning 'between 6:00–23:00', try to avoid combining wording and use of symbols. I.e. as a standalone, 6:00–23:00 is fine, but in prose, use 'between 6:00 and 23:00'.
• '25-kilo volt' should be '25-kilovolt'.
• 'AC' and 'Hz' should probably be spelled out at first mention.
• The sentence "and has carried over 1.25 billion commuters since its inception, more than the country's total population." is rather fuzzy. First, lifetime ridership is actually fairly trivial, and requires frequent updates (the figure is for instance out of date about once a month (by which another 0.01 billions commuters will have taken it). Also, the last fragment sounds like it is taken out of a Trivial Pursuit question, rather than an encyclopedia.
• Any particular reason 'E. Sreedharan' is referred to without his first name, but only an abbreviation?
• 'Calcutta Metro' should be wikilinked the first time. Also, it is first called Calcutta and then Kolkatta. Please be consequent.
• Who described it as "nothing short of a miracle"? This should be mentioned inline, in addition to the reference. It can be as sort as "...by BusinessWeek".
• The article uses both the dating formats DD Month YYYY and Month DD, YYYY. Stick to one.
• When "standard gauge" is being used as an adjective, it should be hyphenated (e.g. "...the second standard-gauge corridor...")
• There is no prose about the Airport Express Line, despite that it is scheduled to open this month.
• Should be 'between 6:00 and 23:00', not 'between 6:00 to 23:00'. ('to' is used in conjunction with 'from', while 'and' is used with 'between').
• Regarding the things about women-only coaches, I know that this was common practice in Europe during the 19th and early 20th century, so the statement is rather blunt. Rather say that it is the second current or new system to feature this.
• 34 m under "accidents" needs to be converted to imperial units.
• Why on earth is "Rolling stock" capitalized in the middle of a sentence?
• "microprocessor controlled" should be hyphenated.
• First mention of closed-circuit television should have "(CCTV)" behind it.
• Rollin stock is generally not regarded as part of the infrastructure (which is normally reserved for the permanent way).
• The text mentions some 6-car trains, but these are not mentioned in the infobox.
• "Central Secretariat - Qutub" should have an endash (–) instead of a hyphen (-).
• There are very few images towards the top of the article, and it is a bit crowded towards to the bottom. Feel free to add additional images.
• Ref 45 is dead.
• Instead of 'Official site of Delhi Metro Rail Corporation Ltd. (DMRC)', just use 'Official site'.

Placing on hold. Looking a lot better than the last time I review it. Most of the stuff above is just details, and the article will pass once they have been seen to. Arsenikk ^(talk) 12:35, 11 October 2010 (UTC)

Replies

Most of the above concerns have been addressed, replies to the rest below:

• E. Sreedharan follows the title of the linked WP article, which in turn is named per WP:NCCN – he is most commonly referred to with the initial.
• The Kolkata Metro was known as the Calcutta Metro until 2001; consequently references to it during the initial construction period of the Delhi Metro (1998-2001) use the old name, to avoid anachronisms. I presume you meant consistent when you stated consequent :-)
• This article primarily deals with the operational portion of the network and in order to maintain compliance with WP:SS and WP:CRYSTAL, under-construction as well as future/proposed lines are mentioned only in brief. In particular, a link to the main Delhi Airport Metro Express article has been provided and a summary of the line's essential details is provided in the table. Detailed information will be added once the line opens.
• Should Rolling stock be moved off to a separate section? For accounting purposes (as I could make out from the annual report), rolling stock is counted together with the rest of the infrastructure (permanent way, stations etc.) while assessing asset value, depreciation etc.
• Ref 45 is quite accessible – were you referring to something else?

Regards, SBC-YPR (talk) 07:33, 20 October 2010 (UTC)

Sorry for the late answer. Please note that a line under construction does not fall under CRYSTAL. Future events may be written about, however, speculation about their outcome is not. In this case, any line under construction will have a host of verifiable facts (such as length, no. of stations, budgeted costs etc). This are not speculation, but, if referenced, statements of facts. Regarding rolling stock, accounting has nothing to do with operations; there is a difference between 'investment' and 'infrastructure'. All investments will have a depreciation, but that does not mean they should be in the same section on Wikipedia. Ref 45 is fine now, perhaps it was out of order for a day (that sometimes happens). Arsenikk ^(talk) 22:39, 30 October 2010 (UTC)

 Done SBC-YPR (talk) 16:41, 9 November 2010 (UTC)

Congratulations with a good article! Arsenikk ^(talk) 08:56, 17 November 2010 (UTC)

manufacturer

There is nothing about the manufacturer and how the coaches were transported. Challiyan (talk) 11:38, 6 January 2011 (UTC)