Talk:Death of Kaja Ballo/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Arsenikk ^(talk) 23:36, 8 September 2010 (UTC)

Comments

• (not GA criteria) It is customary on WP to not include the place of birth and death in the parenthesis immediately after the name, but rather just the date of birth and death, i.e. (1988 – March 28, 2008)
• Don't need to state "Nice, France" after you said "French town of Nice" a few sentences ago.
• (not GA criteria) Title are only capitalized if in front of a name, thus "Church of Scientology's Information Chief in Norway" should be "Church of Scientology's information chief in Norway".
• (not GA criteria) The title of the book should use an endash (–), not a hyphen (-).
• Nice is linked at least three times... Similarly Dagbladet, Verdens Gang and Aftenposten are linked many times.
• (not GA criteria) TV 2 is in italics, but not the Norwegian Broadcasting Corporation.
• See also section should not have links that are in the main body of the article, so remove Oxford Capacity Analysis. Strictly speaking, anything in the navbox should also not be in the see also section, but because of the boxes size, perhaps the rest are okay.
• Lin 57 is a book, so it should have the relevant page numbers.

Well written and informative article. Get the details fixed up, and the article will pass. Arsenikk ^(talk) 23:36, 8 September 2010 (UTC)

Response

Thanks very much for the kind words about the article! Will respond to the above points, and then note it, here at this page. :) -- Cirt (talk) 04:10, 9 September 2010 (UTC)

Okay, at this point all of the above helpful suggestions have been addressed. :) -- Cirt (talk) 23:23, 9 September 2010 (UTC)

Congratulations with another good article. Arsenikk ^(talk) 06:08, 10 September 2010 (UTC)

Thank you, -- Cirt (talk) 14:28, 10 September 2010 (UTC)