Talk:Dear Doctor/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lemonade51 (talk · contribs) 16:22, 31 July 2013 (UTC)

Shall review...

• "UPN requested that the ending of the episode was changed, something that Billingsley didn't like", avoid contractions, spell the bit in bold (BIB) out in its full form.
  • Done. Miyagawa (talk) 17:16, 31 July 2013 (UTC)
• "...it is seen as a controversial episode by fans. Although the episode received the same audience share as the previous episode", to deal with repetition, replace BIB with "Dear Doctor"
  • Done. Miyagawa (talk) 17:16, 31 July 2013 (UTC)
• What does a 3.7/6% share mean?
  • I've inserted the standard sort of line following that to explain the rating. Not sure how it ended up missing from the article, but its there now. Miyagawa (talk) 17:16, 31 July 2013 (UTC)
• "It was first released in the United States on DVD; having been released as part of...", replace semicolon with comma.

• Done. Miyagawa (talk) 17:16, 31 July 2013 (UTC)

• "Indeed, Phlox's argument is reminiscent of some Social Darwinist theories which suggest that modern medicine slows evolution by allowing the weak to survive", the source doesn't contrast Phlox's argument with Darwinist theories. Perhaps you can cite one that does, in addition to Murray's book.
  • I surprised myself, and found one that did it pretty precisely - I wasn't sure of the source, but the author seems reliable. Miyagawa (talk) 17:16, 31 July 2013 (UTC)
• Ref 7 is The Sydney Morning Herald
  • Done. Miyagawa (talk)

No dab or dead links. No issue with the licensing of the Billingsley image. Shall pass once comments have been addressed. On hold until then. Lemonade51 (talk) 16:22, 31 July 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for the review, let me know if there's anything else you'd like me to look at. Miyagawa (talk) 17:16, 31 July 2013 (UTC)

Given my comments have been addressed and after reading the article for a second time, I'll be happy to pass this now. Nice job. :) Lemonade51 (talk) 17:44, 31 July 2013 (UTC)