Talk:Daniel McBreen/GA1

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Reviewer: Royroydeb (talk · contribs) 08:00, 9 July 2015 (UTC)

• after his father took up an offer to play football for Edgeworth Eagles. - Which year? /How old was McBreen?
  • Well, in 1977 when he was six weeks old...! Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
• debut later that year - later?
  • Removed. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
• and scored six goals from 23 appearances - 6 goals from 23 appearances
  • Per WP:NUMERAL, "Integers from zero to nine are spelled out in words". Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
• making 38 appearances but only scoring eight goals,
  • See above. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
• came in November 2006 - only November is enough
  • Per WP:CONSISTENCY and WP:STO, I always add the year to any dates. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
• ... after buying out the remainder.... - I think the entire sentence should be reworded
  • Reworded. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
• seven appearances and one goal - here the number are in words
  • See above. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
• defeat to Sydney - the club is known as Sydney FC
  • Done. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
• "He made 31 appearances and scored five goals", " four goals from 30 matches "
  • See above.
• his contract expired in May 2015. - The infobox still shows him as a South China player
  • Updated. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
• provides a threat at set pieces. - Isnt it someone's opinion?
  • I guess so, as is the sentence preceding it, but it is cited by a reliable source. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)

RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:59, 14 July 2015 (UTC) Mattythewhite