Talk:Daniel Edlen

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Gryllida in topic Draft collaboration & comments

Draft collaboration & comments

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Declined. This submission does not appear to be written in the formal tone expected of an encyclopedia article. Entries should be written from a neutral point of view, and should refer to a range of independent, reliable, published sources. Please rewrite your submission in a more encyclopedic format. Please make sure to avoid peacock terms, that are designed to promote or show-off the subject. --AmaryllisGardener (talk) 14 July 2014


Try to avoid saying things like "His work has been noted for being meticulous and hyper-realistic" and "creates art on the artifacts of creativity". AmaryllisGardener talk 21:27, 14 July 2014 (UTC)Reply


Is http://www.huffingtonpost.com/2012/09/14/artist-daniel-edlen-paint_n_1885577.html?utm_hp_ref=arts the correct HuffPo article link? j⚛e deckertalk 06:13, 29 July 2014 (UTC)Reply


Approved. Corrections made:

  • During my review, I had to remove an external link from article body to a separate section. Only wikilinks should be inline.
  • "He" in a first sentence of a paragraph is not good style. I replaced with "Daniel Edlen".
  • Dedlen is perhaps a nickname, but biographies article are named in the full names where appropriate. Use "Daniel Edlen" or "Daniel Edlen (artist)".
  • Categories' colons removed.

If you have any questions, ask on this page. Thank you. Gryllida (talk) 10:55, 7 September 2014 (UTC)Reply