Talk:Danganronpa: Unlimited Battle/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cognissonance (talk · contribs) 06:04, 28 October 2016 (UTC)

Unlimited Battle! ..."ceased operations in November 2015..." Cognissonance (talk) 06:04, 28 October 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• "similarly to billiards" — Fix grammar: "as with billiards".

•  Done

• "confined arena area" — Coincide with Gameplay: "confined arena-like area".

•  Done

• "one noted that the game retained the style of the previous games in the series, however," — Improve flow: "one noted however that the game retained the style of the previous games in the series".

•  Done

Gameplay

• Remove a repeated billiards link.

•  Done

• "in a billiards-like fashion" — Minimize repetition: "like billiards".

•  Done

• "After a certain number of turns had passed" — Minimize repetition: "With a certain number of turns passed".

•  Done

• "As the player defeated enemies, the enemies would drop two types of items" — Simplify: "Defeated enemies would drop two types of items".

•  Done

• "of the player's character" — Simplify: "of the player character".

• Well, "player character" makes it sound like it's the player's avatar or whatever - the character representing them, or the character they control - which doesn't seem to be the case with the characters in DR:UB. Anyway, changed it to "their characters".

Release and reception

• The section should be written in past tense.

•  Done

• "found the game fun and requiring skill and strategy" — Clarify: "found the game fun, requiring skill and strategy".

•  Done

• "why Spike Chunsoft would chose a game known for "story of entrapment and murder mystery" as a game for a touchscreen action game" — Fix grammar and clarify: "why Spike Chunsoft would choose a series known for "story of entrapment and murder mystery" to make a touchscreen action game".

•  Done, but I went with "as the base for" rather than "to make".

• Write the prefixes A at B with variation.

•  Done

Overall

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall: Ping me when you're done / have questions.

   Pass/Fail:

   @IDV: Cognissonance (talk) 15:01, 28 October 2016 (UTC)

   @Cognissonance: I believe I have fixed everything.--IDV^talk 15:24, 28 October 2016 (UTC)

8. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   Pass/Fail:

   @IDV: Good stuff. Cognissonance (talk) 15:42, 28 October 2016 (UTC)