Talk:Damien (South Park)/GA1

Latest comment: 15 years ago by Theleftorium in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Excellent article, guys! You can probably gets this to FA status in the future.



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Lead
  • It was directed by Trey Parker... – His full name has already been mentioned.
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  • was rated TV-MA-L in the United States – Add an explanation of what TV-MA-L means ("for strong to extreme language").
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Plot
  • Link characters such as Kenny and Mr. Mackey.
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  • Link "duck-billed platypus"
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  • The kids return from the cable studio with – Cable studio?
    • I don't see this in the article anymore, so I'm guessing Moody got it. — Hunter Kahn (contribs) 02:55, 8 April 2009 (UTC)Reply
  • Tomorrow The next day at the South Park Forum
  • Use Template:Convert to convert pounds into kilograms.
  • Spell out contractions such as "it's", "didn't", and "that's" (I'm not sure if there's more).
Production
  • Image caption says "Weight Gain 4000" when it should say "Damien".
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  • in part because it was the first new episode of
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  • Trey Parker said he and fellow show creator Matt Stone
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  • so Matt Stone instead provided the character's voice
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  • By the time "Damien" was filmed – Is "filmed" really the right word? I don't think animated shows are filmed so a better word would be "animated".
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  • three-dimension seldom used in the series before – Should it be "three-dimension seldom never used in the series before"?
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  • naturally while filming recording the episode
  • Kenny, Jimbo, duck-billed platypus, and Pip should be linked in the plot section, not here.
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  • along with 11 eleven other episodes
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  • along with the other 12 twelve from the first season
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Other
  • Repeated use of "kid/s" isn't really formal - I'd go with "child/ren", but it's not too big a deal.
    • Looks like Moody got these too, besides the quotes again. — Hunter Kahn (contribs) 02:55, 8 April 2009 (UTC)Reply
Themes
  • Trey Parker said the writers sought
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  • Seitz said the episode mocks people who "morality cops who misbehave in private"
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  • Matt Stone said of this aspect
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Cultural references
  • provided by Trey Parker (sorry for nagging) ;P
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  • Pinhead character at the ending of the 1992 horror movie film, Hellraiser III: Hell on Earth
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Reception
  • What does "HH" mean?
    • I honestly don't know! lol But looking back at the source it appears to be the same as Nielsen Rating, so I'll drop the use of the HH thing altogether to avoid confusion. — Hunter Kahn (contribs) 05:03, 9 April 2009 (UTC)Reply
  • What episode got "5.4 viewers in 3.2 million households", "Damien" or "Mecha-Streisand"?
    • "Mecha-Streisand". Unfortunately, the source doesn't have the viewers/households for "Damien" specifically, but I thought it was worth including the Mecha-Streisand numbers because it gave a bit of context to what the ratings mean for both episodes. I threw the part in question into parenthesis to try to clarify which episode it relates to. — Hunter Kahn (contribs) 05:03, 9 April 2009 (UTC)Reply
  • Trey Parker said following the tremendous
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  • Rolling Stone contributor Doug Pratt called it a "high point" of the first season
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  • Gary Budzak of The Columbus Dispatch described Damien – Damien the character or Damien the episode? :P
Lead
  • which leads to the ultimate fight between Jesus and Satan – How does it lead to the "ultimate fight" between Jesus and Satan?
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  Not done – That sentence still doesn't make any sense for someone who hasn't read the plot section. :P TheLeftorium 16:01, 8 April 2009 (UTC)Reply
  • I made some changes to the sentence. Let me know what you think. —TheLeftorium 12:22, 9 April 2009 (UTC)Reply


I will finish the review later today or tomorrow. —TheLeftorium 16:27, 7 April 2009 (UTC)Reply

  • Thank you, sir! Let me know if we missed anything above between the two of us. Thanks for the review! — Hunter Kahn (contribs) 02:55, 8 April 2009 (UTC)Reply
    • I have finished the review now and I will take another quick look once you're done with this. :) TheLeftorium 16:32, 8 April 2009 (UTC)Reply