Talk:Ctenomyces serratus/Archive 1
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Dorsa's peer review
General Comments
- Overall, I enjoyed your article very much as it is well organized and well researched
- I enjoy your subheadings as they give a good flow to your article
- I think your lead section is quite effective, perhaps you could consider making it more reflective of the entire article as it seems to have a lot of focus on geographical distribution right now. Maybe you can include something about it's health implications as well?
History and Taxonomy
- Perhaps, include some more information about the history of the species, the reference by Orr has a detailed description of the history that you may want to explore even further
- I like the point you included about the order, Onygenales and how it has unique features
- Maybe include some more on the taxonomy of the species, for example you can give some more information on it's classification within the Ctenomyces genus
- It also may be interesting to explore the latin or greek origin of the name in this section, you can try and find the etymology of the serratus
Appearance and Growth
- There are some articles that discuss the pH sensitivity of this fungus, especially in bird's nests https://academic.oup.com/mmy/article-abstract/5/1/49/1654178
- I'm not sure if you wanted to include a physiology section where you can talk about metabolism and resproduction but here's a source that has some information on the physiology https://link.springer.com/article/10.1007/BF02089874
- Great description of the appearance! - here is another source if you're looking for some more information on the appearance https://books.google.ca/books?id=ZFA4DwAAQBAJ&pg=PA209&dq=Ctenomyces+serratus&hl=en&sa=X&ved=0ahUKEwiYouuj_bXeAhXSuFkKHW9QDVcQ6AEIMzAC#v=onepage&q=Ctenomyces%20serratus&f=false
Habitat and Global Distribution
- I found this article that also says that the species was isolated in Australia and New Guinea https://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0007153661800399
Human and Animal Health Implications
- You can talk more about it's pathogenicity to birds some more here
- For example, here's a paper mentioning C. serratus found in turkeys https://www.ajol.info/index.php/sjd/article/view/32875
Dorsa77 (talk) 02:33, 2 November 2018 (UTC)
Godfrey's Peer Review
Hi Rnoorani
I like how your general outline of your Wikipedia page is well organized and how each heading has a very nice flow to it.
In the lead section, I like how you give a general outline of what will be discussed in the rest of the article. However, I think your first sentence should mention how your fungus is keratinophilic and how it is an etiological agent in nail infection. After reading your article, this is what stood out to me and by making this your first statement, I think that it would really grab the readers’ attention.
I noticed that there are some words that should be considered for the use of hyperlinks. For instance, countries/location, keratin, onygenales, ascospores, ascocarp or ascomata(pl), ascus or asci(pl), hypha, arthoconidia, and kappa opioid receptors
Under human and animal health implications: you mentioned that Kappa opioid receptors were extracted from it. I think it would be great if you went to further details on its pharmacological effects. Using the same source by Saito et. al., you could mention how it relates to the chemical structure of morphine and how it is used in the treatment for detoxification of narcotics dependency
Some suggestions
- references look OK
- try to use common language instead of technical jargon where possible, e.g., punctate, evanescent, ramified, echinulate, asperulate, ctenoid, etc.
- I made a few edits which might be helpful as you develop your full article
- there are a few things you can link, e.g., country names, keratin, opioid receptor, etc.