Talk:Crocodiles (album)/GA1

Latest comment: 16 years ago by JD554 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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  • Firstly, just as a note for the future, the GA reviewer generally creates this page... you just need to add the template to the talk page. :)
    • Ah you're right! Just noticed that when I double checked, I'll remember for next time!
  • "Singles released by the band and included on the album" - bleh... could you trim this to something like "SINGLE 1 and SINGLE 2 were released as singles"... it's a bit wordy as is.
    • Done
  • "was produced by Ian Broudie and by Bill Drummond and David Balfe." - overuse of "and", etc.
    • Reworded to try to show that Drummond and Balfe produced the album and Broudie produced "Rescue".
  • "author Chris Adams said that in 1980 Creem magazine had written" - took me a while to work out what was being said here... perhaps "in 1980 Cream magazine wrote..." or another reword?
    • Reworded. I had originally used that to try to show it was a tertiary source.
  • "Although Sergeant was less happy and said" - starting a sentence with "although" is weird...
    • Removed "Although"
  • "the following year, 1990." - you say 1989 last sentence, so you don't need to say the year here... it's pretty clear.
    • Fixed
  • The Commons template isn't really appropriate, and does MTV have permission to post up those lyrics (otherwise copyvio issues)?
    • Removed commons (legacy of an earlier editor) and yes MTV have a licence for lyrics.

The rest seems good! giggy (:O) 11:52, 13 June 2008 (UTC)Reply