Close paraphrasing, lack of independent references, and promotional tone

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Currently reviewing article to conform wikipedia articles of style and placing /refs. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 65.51.203.4 (talkcontribs) 15:13, 20 August 2009

Article was taken from subject's web page with permission. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 65.51.203.4 (talk) 13:48, 21 August 2009 (UTC)Reply

Article was re-written. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 65.51.203.4 (talk) 16:18, 21 August 2009 (UTC)Reply

Please see Wikipedia:Close paraphrasing. Changing words here and there is not enough to get around copyright issues. Hairhorn (talk) 19:39, 21 August 2009 (UTC)Reply

Page is being further re-written. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 65.51.203.4 (talkcontribs) 20:37, 21 August 2009

  • This page has not been "re-written". It is still full of close paraphrasing. Please read the link above. To 65.51.203.4/User:Georgewienbarg, do not remove the close paraphrasing notice from the article until it has been completely re-written to conform to the required standards. Note also that I have edited this article to remove the hype and "PR-speak", but the basic close paraphrasing remains. Note also that the material lifted from http://www.cristinafontanelli.com/bio.html cannot be "used with permission" simply by stating so on this talk page. The proper procedures must be followed followed. See Wikipedia:Requesting copyright permission for instructions. Even then, its promotional, unreferenced, and unencyclopedic style and organization would be unsuitable and require heavy editing. Voceditenore (talk) 07:58, 28 August 2009 (UTC)Reply
Stubbed: I've restored the article to a prior revision that did not infringe copyright, since the permission did not materialise. – Toon 22:15, 17 November 2009 (UTC)Reply