Talk:Copidosoma floridanum

Latest comment: 1 year ago by PrimeBOT in topic Wikipedia Ambassador Program course assignment

Peer Review

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I'm a student from Washington University reviewing my peer's additions to the behavior sections of this article. Overall, I think the information is very in depth and spans a good variety of topics within behavior. My biggest suggestion would be to explain each topic more thoroughly. I had trouble understanding a lot of the material, and had to really work to read it. I think you should keep in mind that not only entomologists and animal behavior experts are reading this page. Just explaining the topics in more colloquial terms would help. Here are some specific suggestions for the sections:

  • Reproductive altruism: I would define eusociality and haplodiploid sex determination, since these are pivotal to altruism in social insects. Also, what is unique about the eusocial system of these wasps?
Link to haplodiploid and eusociality for a full description; leave no more than a sentence or two summarizing each here. Aderksen (talk) 03:30, 4 November 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • Agression and spite: I don’t understand how there could be negative relatedness within the two eggs if they are both clonally derived and came from the same mother. Could you clarify this?
Agreed. This needs to be clarified. Aderksen (talk) 03:30, 4 November 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • Cellular compatibility of wasp within host: What is the morula-stage embryo? This section may need a bit more explanation. I don’t understand how the embryo attaches itself to host cells.

I think this article is off to a good start. Good luck! Blubird25 (talk) 00:23, 1 November 2013 (UTC)Reply

I agree completely with the previous user. I love the depth of the content of the article and think it's really well-researched, but some of the terminology you're using is inaccessible to a layman. I would explain things like castes, direct benefits, and kin recognition in more accessible terms. Otherwise, I liked the writing and think it's a great start.Solon5g93 (talk) 02:53, 1 November 2013 (UTC)Reply
Then by all means, link to the appropriate terms elsewhere in wikipedia. You don't need to define everything in this article if you can link to an article that defines the term. Burn a sentence or two on the subject at most - but allow the user to follow-up elsewhere if needed. Aderksen (talk) 03:30, 4 November 2013 (UTC)Reply
Hey, I edited this on October 31st but forgot to post on the talkpage. I primarily made changes to grammar and phrasing. The information in your article is great, but it was phrased a little confusingly at times so I just moved around some phrasing. Moving forward, the description and taxonomy sections are looking off. I would either expand them or remove them. (Expanding would be better for the article obviously, so I would recommend that.) Rosemaryshanley (talk) 21:28, 20 November 2013 (UTC)Reply

Wikipedia Ambassador Program course assignment

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  This article is the subject of an educational assignment at Washington University supported by the Wikipedia Ambassador Program during the 2012 Fall term. Further details are available on the course page.

The above message was substituted from {{WAP assignment}} by PrimeBOT (talk) on 17:19, 2 January 2023 (UTC)Reply