Talk:Commissioner Government/GA1

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Adityavagarwal in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Adityavagarwal (talk · contribs) 15:27, 26 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

It is an interesting article. I am glad to pick it up for a review! Would be making straight forward changes as I go, but, as always, please feel free to revert any, if I make a mistake!   Adityavagarwal (talk) 15:27, 26 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

  • "included;" extra semi-colon I guess. :P
  • Good pick-up, used a colon and then semi-colons.
  • Perhaps the lead could be expanded a bit? Not a compulsion though, as it looks good even now. However, I just thought that we could have a bit more in the lead.
  • Added a bit about German supervision.
  • Perhaps give a slight idea of what these German military ranks are, in brackets? Reichsmarschall, etc.
  • Added notes with footnotes, except Reichsmarschall, which was a unique rank and position.
  • "the Luftwaffe transfer a training school..." would be better to name the Luftwaffe instead, as it seems ambiguous (I think it is schroder?)!
  • reworded, see what you think?
  • "This meeting resolved to shift to a general uprising" This should be reworded.
  • added "from sabotage operations" after shift
  • "administration encouraged 545 or 546 prominent" I did not quite understand the numbers... 545 or 546?
  • There is a note which explains the different numbers in the sources.

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