Talk:Colin Falkland Gray/GA1
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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 18:34, 4 October 2020 (UTC)
- Link North Sea
- Link Yorkshire at the first mention, not the second
- "Flying another Spitfire, he had to make a forced landing when his engine was damaged following an encounter with Bf 109s over Biggin Hill" - This still on August 31?
- "Gray was promoted to flight lieutenant in August 1941,[26] The same month" - Looks like this comma should probably be a period.
- "Gray spent a short period of time at No. 485 Squadron, largely made up of New Zealand flying personnel before taking command of No. 64 Squadron," - Comma after personnel
- "which was based in Algeria and was the first unit in the Middle East to fly the Spitfire Mk. IX" - Algeria isn't really in the Middle East
- "Although he made no official claim for this encounter,[30], " - Drop the second comma
- Link George VI.
- Link Buckingham Palace
- If his command served at Arnhem, should Market Garden be added to the list of campaigns in the infobox?
- Is there a link for secondment? If not, can you briefly gloss it?
- Is cause of death known?
- Given the relative length of the article, the lead's a bit on the short side.
- While the DNZB source gives date of death as 1 August, the Independent gives 2 August
That's about it. Placing on hold for these to be sorted out. Hog Farm Bacon 15:08, 5 October 2020 (UTC)