Talk:Clocks (song)/GA1

GA Review

Background

• "The band's vocalist, Chris Martin, came in studio late one night. A riff popped in Martin's mind and wrote it on piano." Consider re-writing this as one sentence. At the very least it needs "in studio" changed to "into the studio" and "in Martin's mind and wrote ..." to "into Martin's mind and he wrote ..."
• "During the writing of "Clocks", the band had already made 10 songs for the album." This isn't quite what you mean. During should be before.
• "With this, they thought it was too late for the song's inclusion in the album. So, they recorded a demo version of the track and saved it with other unfinished tracks, labeling it "Songs for #3"" Again this really needs re-writing or changed to one sentence.
• "Martin assumed on further developing the track." This is fairly poor English, it needs re-writing.
• "The last song included in the album, Coldplay recorded the song very fast." Again very poor.
  • Any idea? I have no better idea. --Efe (talk) 09:39, 10 August 2008 (UTC)
    • On the face of it, change it to something like "Because it was the last song included on the album, Coldplay recorded the song very quickly." However, this sentence really does ask a lot of questions which could improve it anyway. Why didn't they just delay the album? How quickly was it recorded? Did it have any impact on the quality of the song/recording? Did they later wish they had left it off until the next album? Peanut4 (talk) 14:02, 10 August 2008 (UTC)
• "By the time Martin recorded his vocals, a few people inside the studio felt the song "is something special"" The tenses are wrong.
• "According to Martin, "Clocks" was inspired by the English rock band Muse." This seems a trivial fact tagged on at the end. Consider adding it further up to tie in with Martin initially writing the song.

Release

• Second and third pars are unreferenced.
• "A music video exist in support of the song." Consider changing "exist". Make it more dynamic.

Reception

• A few references are needed for the first paragraph.

Reworked versions

• "On November 13, 2006, the album Rhythms del Mundo by the Buena Vista Social Club was released, featuring a reworked version of "Clocks"." Do you have a reference for this?
• "Another remix has surfaced by The String Quartet." Or this?
• "A single cover, created by Sølve Sundsbø, depicts lead singer Chris Martin with his hands folded on a glass table. The drawing perspective is looking from below the table." Not sure why this in this section?

I'll put it on hold for the time being. The main things that need doing are a good copy edit of the "background" section - I would possibly even suggest asking for an independent edit; and a good deal of referencing. Peanut4 (talk) 00:33, 8 August 2008 (UTC)

Background

• I've reverted an IP edit regarding Martin's friend who convinced him to finish the track. My initial feeling was since it was not said who the friend was that the info wasn't readily available. Are there any reliable sources which can be used to point to the identity of the friend, or would it be too much rumour to add it? Peanut4 (talk) 13:51, 10 August 2008 (UTC)

I haven't found a source regarding Martin's friend. --Efe (talk) 06:58, 13 August 2008 (UTC)

Lead

• Sorry to butt in here but I think this sentence in the lead should be cleared up: "The song has existing several mixes..." Think it would be better to say "several remixes of the track exist" if that's what you mean. Cavie78 (talk) 10:20, 12 August 2008 (UTC)

Fixed as suggested. --Efe (talk) 06:58, 13 August 2008 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Perhaps a couple more appropriate images but everything else looks in decent shape and meets the GA criteria. Peanut4 (talk) 21:56, 15 August 2008 (UTC)

There are actually a lot of free images of Coldplay performing live; however, I do not know if its "Clocks". Anyway, still hunting images to beautify/enhance the article. Thanks for the review and for passing it to GA. --Efe (talk) 06:12, 16 August 2008 (UTC)