Talk:Clinton Presidential Center/GA1

Latest comment: 14 years ago by Fetchcomms in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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This article looks great after a quick read-through, though some of the sections seem a little short. Please try to expand it, especially Main Building and History (section lead). More to come soon. Reviewer: Reywas92Talk 02:34, 12 January 2010 (UTC)Reply

(Er, I add comments here?). yes, I'm in the process of gathering more information (I'm allowed to add substantial content during the review, right?)  fetchcomms 03:45, 13 January 2010 (UTC)Reply
I've added a bit more to the history, but I'm still trying to find more for it and the main building sections, especially with some exhibits.  fetchcomms 04:43, 15 January 2010 (UTC)Reply

Yes, of course, that's the whole point of the review. Here are some further comments:

  • There's a misplaced modifier in the first sentence. It implies that the School of Public Service was established by Clinton, but nothing else.
  • Write out NARA so readers know what it means.
  • "Approximately $10 million of which came from Saudi Arabia." is not a complete sentence.

Also work on expanding the info about what's actually inside the Center. Thanks! Reywas92Talk 01:39, 16 January 2010 (UTC)Reply

OK, I'll fix the little errors, and I'll add exhibit information as soon as I can find enough.  fetchcomms 22:49, 16 January 2010 (UTC)Reply
I've added a new exhibits section and done a few minor additions in general.  fetchcomms 02:15, 22 January 2010 (UTC)Reply

That seems adequate. I'm sure there's still more that can be said about the Center, but no article can have it all. This passes the GA criteria, but I hope you continue to improve and expand it and maybe even take it to FLC! Reywas92Talk 22:52, 22 January 2010 (UTC)Reply

Thank you very much! I'm hoping to be able to find a comprehensive book on the subject, but haven't located one yet (I think it's still too new). This has been an excellent first experience for me! Thanks again,  fetchcomms 00:26, 23 January 2010 (UTC)Reply
P.S. I think you mean FAC? lol  fetchcomms 00:28, 23 January 2010 (UTC)Reply