Talk:Clavado en un Bar/GA1

Latest comment: 2 years ago by Kyle Peake in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:05, 16 January 2022 (UTC)Reply


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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

Reviewing an article of yours; been a good amount of time since I had previously! --K. Peake 09:05, 16 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

Infobox and lead

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  • Remove the mixing studio from the infobox, as that is different from recording
  • Why is Quinta Del Mar mentioned before Puerto Vallarta here but not in the body?
  • reggae rock → Reggae rock
  • Pipe WEA Latina to Warner Music Latina
  • Wikilink as Fher Olvera instead
  • Add a comma after fifth studio album
  • "It was written by the group's lead vocalist Fher Olvera who handled productions" → "The song was written by the band's lead vocalist Fher Olvera, who handled the production"
  • "The track was released as" → "It was released as"
  • Wikilink lead single
  • "the protagonist is" → "the protagonist is depicted as" or something similar, to be clear
  • "was met with positive reactions" → "received positive reactions" and start a new para here
  • Add after music critics, "who mostly praised..." whatever was highlighted the most
  • "received an" → "The song garnered an"
  • "Commercially, it peaked at number" → "In the United States, it peaked at numbers"
  • Pipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine)
  • "charts in the United States." → "charts, respectively."
  • ""Clavado en un Bar" was" → "The song was"
  • Remove Dominican Republic intro to the singer
  • "and peaked at number ten" → "and the version peaked at number 10" per MOS:NUM
  • Remove "in the US" at the end because we already know Billboard charts mentioned here are for that region

Background and composition

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  • Remove the comma after fifth studio album
  • Mention that the studio is in Quinta Del Mar, Puerto Vallarta
  • I can't access the El Norte source so don't know what that says about studios, but why are some from AllMusic not included?
  • Pipe mixing to Audio mixing (recorded music)
  • Remove lead vocalist introduction because that being in the lead is sufficient
  • Pipe punk to Punk rock
  • If the lyrics end with a full sentence quoted, punctuation should be inside the quote for "you come rescue me."

Promotion and reception

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  • Wikilink lead single
  • "for song was filmed which" → "for the song was filmed that same year, which" per the source
  • Add the word "about" after commented
  • "and again at the" → "before performing the songs again at the"
  • "the catchy rocker".[13] Burr" → "the catchy rocker",[13] while Burr"
  • "of the Fresno Bee" → "of The Fresno Bee" with the wikilink
  • Wikilink the Rolling Stones
  • "that the song was" → "that the song is"
  • "It also peaked" → "The song also peaked"
  • The ASCAP award should be at the start of the second para instead
  • "at number ten on" → "at number 10 on" per MOS:NUM
  • "from the episode" → "for the episode"
  • Pipe of the same name to Clavado En Un Bar (New Girl) per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • "where it played" → "where it was played"

Formats and track listings

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  • Good

Charts

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  • Good

References

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  • Copyvio score looks superb at 6.5%!!!
  • Pipe El Norte to El Norte (Monterrey) on ref 1, if that is the correct publication
  • Remove AllMusic from the titles of refs 2, 4, 10 and 19
  • Pipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine) and Nielsen Business Media to Nielsen Holdings on ref 3
  • Wikilink Rolling Stone on ref 5
  • Add the via parameter citing Newspapers.com for refs 6, 13 and 16, only wikilinking on 6 and adding the url-access to 16
  • Cite NBC 5 Dallas-Fort Worth as publisher instead on ref 11 and pipe to KXAS-TV
  • Fresno BeeThe Fresno Bee on ref 14 with the wikilink and remove the double speech mark from the title
  • Remove pipe on Billboard and Nielsen Business Media for ref 18
  • Fix MOS:QWQ issues with refs 22 and 23
  • Pipe WEA Latina to Warner Music Latina on ref 24

Final comments and verdict

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