Talk:Cincinnati Radiation Experiments

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This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Keiradams. Peer reviewers: Whitneygeorge, VjiaoBlack.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 19:05, 17 January 2022 (UTC)

Peer Review

This article is really interesting and informative! I'm surprised there was not an article already. I really have few suggestions for improvement, only separating the reference list from the bottom text and adding links to other articles, but the content looks really good and stayed very factual without letting biases creep in. Where there any patient quotes, or doctor quotes that you could find? If you wanted to add anymore content that could be interesting. Whitneygeorge (talk) 04:25, 5 May 2017 (UTC)

I think it's absolutely amazing that you found all this information, and a testament to your skill and passion that you've done so much work on the article ahead of the deadline. However, your writing still reads a bit more like an essay rather than a Wikipedia article - I'd suggest trying to use shorter sentences and really parse out the sentences so that they each carry only one or two points each, and the information is organized clearly by paragraph. Unlike an essay, I think it's okay to repeat things, if they're important - so you can use that to help you structure the article better. I'm still working on my own article, but I'd love to propose some light restructuring later. VjiaoBlack (talk) 15:32, 5 May 2017 (UTC)

Also, check your sources - some of the ibsn numbers seem to be invalid. VjiaoBlack (talk) 19:40, 5 May 2017 (UTC)