Talk:Christmas in the United States (1946–1964)/GA1

GA Review

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Hello. I will be doing the GA review for this article. Here are some initial suggestions:

  • Per WP:LEAD, an article of this size should have a lead with three or four full paragraphs summarizing all the main points of the article.
--Done. ReverendLogos (talk) 00:50, 26 January 2009 (UTC)Reply
  • I think the lead also needs to specify the years that this article covers, 1946-1964.
--Done. ReverendLogos (talk) 09:28, 25 January 2009 (UTC)Reply
--Done. ReverendLogos (talk) 09:46, 25 January 2009 (UTC)Reply
  • There should be at least one citation in every paragraph.
--Done. ReverendLogos (talk) 00:50, 26 January 2009 (UTC)Reply
  • There are several sections without a single reference, including National Christmas Tree, Santa's Workshop, and others.
--Done. ReverendLogos (talk) 00:50, 26 January 2009 (UTC)Reply
--Done. ReverendLogos (talk) 00:50, 26 January 2009 (UTC)Reply

That's it for now. The article will remain on hold for seven days for these initial changes. Depending on the progress after seven days, I'll decide on whether to keep the review open. If I do, I'll then add more specific suggestions to the list. Nikki311 22:52, 24 January 2009 (UTC)Reply

Review Part 2

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  • I have some questions about a couple of the sources used:
    • What makes TVParty reliable?
Done. Deleted. ReverendLogos (talk) 17:01, 4 February 2009 (UTC)Reply
    • Refs 35 and 40 have formatting mistakes.
Done. ReverendLogos (talk) 17:01, 4 February 2009 (UTC)Reply
    • About.com is generally considered unreliable. What makes Robert Fontenot an expert?
-Done. ReverendLogos (talk) 16:14, 4 February 2009 (UTC)Reply
That sounds like qualified to me. :) Nikki311 01:07, 6 February 2009 (UTC)Reply
  • Avoid WP:PEACOCK terms such as "prestigious", "significant", etc.
-Done.ReverendLogos (talk) 16:59, 4 February 2009 (UTC)Reply
  • There are some dash issues. WP:DASH should help sort out when to use a dash vs endash vs emdash.
-Done.ReverendLogos (talk) 05:27, 5 February 2009 (UTC)Reply
  • In Toys, "Thirty of the one hundred toys on the list were created and manufactured during America's post-War years." needs a source.
-Done. Don't have a source for this. I just counted them on the list. I'll delete line.ReverendLogos (talk) 16:59, 4 February 2009 (UTC)Reply
  • Other films needs sources.
-Done Deleted. Cannot find sources except IMDb and I believe we cannot use it because its user created. ReverendLogos (talk) 15:39, 8 February 2009 (UTC)Reply
  • Dates don't have to be linked anymore. Actually, reviewers at FAC make editors removed the links from articles because they are "common terms".
-Done.ReverendLogos (talk) 05:30, 5 February 2009 (UTC)Reply
  • I don't see the point of the header Miscellanea and the subheader Christmas clubs. Wouldn't make sense to remove Miscellanea and make Christmas clubs the level 2 header?
Done.ReverendLogos (talk) 16:11, 4 February 2009 (UTC)Reply
  • The second paragraph in Christmas clubs needs some sources.
-Done. Deleted. Has no source. ReverendLogos (talk) 16:11, 4 February 2009 (UTC)Reply
I'm sorry. Just this sentence: "Drawbacks such as restrictions on allowing early withdrawals could snare careless depositors." You are right about the rest being plot and not needed a source. Nikki311 01:09, 6 February 2009 (UTC)Reply
Done. ReverendLogos (talk) 16:14, 4 February 2009 (UTC)Reply

Nikki311 03:01, 3 February 2009 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for the message. I'm kind of busy in real-life at the moment, so give me a day or two to do another thorough review. Nikki311 01:14, 10 February 2009 (UTC)Reply

Part 3

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Nikki311 01:33, 11 February 2009 (UTC)Reply

Final assessment

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Thanks for addressing my comments so quickly. I believe everything is in order now, and the article is broad enough (maybe not comprehensive, though, I'm not familiar enough with the topic to tell) to be passed. Good job and congratulations. :) Nikki311 21:00, 14 February 2009 (UTC)Reply