Talk:Christmas imperial pigeon/GA1

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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 20:58, 26 December 2019 (UTC)Reply

added juvenile, but there doesn't seem to be sexual dimorphism. I wasn't exactly sure how much description was necessary   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  21:24, 26 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
Alsways good to have a look at promoted articles about related animals, for example there is Trocaz pigeon. FunkMonk (talk) 21:29, 26 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
How's it looking now?   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  23:47, 27 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • The book Pigeons and Doves A Guide to the Pigeons and Doves of the World has more info on this bird, I can send you the relevant pages on email.
I can access the first page, and only the conservation sections are cut off which are talked about in sources I can access   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  21:24, 26 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
Must be a different layout in the edition you can see then, in the one I have as PDF, a very long description section comes after status. Here's a temporary link for the pages:[1] FunkMonk (talk) 21:27, 26 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
Thanks, added vocalizations. The rest I could already read/could use different sources   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  23:45, 27 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • Pink-headed imperial pigeon is duplinked in the same section.
fixed   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  21:24, 26 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • "as a distinct species D. whartoni" Comma before the name?
added   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  18:15, 29 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • No genetic work?
I vaguely remember there was a genetic report on Ducula but they excluded the Christmas imperial pigeon   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  18:15, 29 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • The books ource indicates there is sexual dimorphism in length, which should be mentioned.
added   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  14:02, 2 January 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • "Imperial pigeons are able to stretch the base of the jaw to eat larger food items." This belongs under behaviour/ecology.
moved   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  18:15, 29 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • The book states it is a large species within Ducula and is relatively lightly built, which is worth noting.
added   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  18:15, 29 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • "An egg taken in 1914" Not sure if the year is relevant?
It's like saying "specimen XYZ, found in 1914, was..."   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  18:15, 29 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • "seeds swallowed whole and remaining intact." Missing "are"?
it's a dependent clause   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  18:15, 29 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • "They have been reported smaller seeded plants as the stinkwood" Missing "eating" and "such as"?
fixed   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  18:15, 29 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • "with sightings of several hundreds where the plant is common" Specify several hundred birds/pigeons.
added   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  18:15, 29 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • The book states one egg is usually laid (sometimes two), there are possibly two broods a year, that it may nest colonially, describes its flight, and that it usuallt feeds singly. These, and perhaps other, facts are pretty essential and should be covered in the article.
added   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  14:18, 2 January 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • The first paragrapgh of the "population" section is about habitat, and that is also the most widely used name for such sections here and in the literature, so that would be a more fitting title.
changed   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  18:15, 29 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • The rest of the population section is basically about status and conservation (you even cover the IUCN there), and how humans have affected the species, so it should be in the conservation section.
done   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  18:15, 29 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • There is more info on its preferred habitat in the book which should be added.
added   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  14:18, 2 January 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • The book states it was near extinct in the 1940s, crucual info which should be covered under conservation.
I don't know where they got that from because every other source agrees that the first estimate of population was made in 1975. 1940s might have been a typo or something   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  14:02, 2 January 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • "A 1994 survey found the diet of feral cats to predominantly the Christmas imperial pigeon" some word missing, would be less awkward if you for example said "the diet of feral cats consisted predominantly of".
done   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  18:15, 29 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • "Yellow crazy ant population is controlled by" Should begin with "the".
added   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  18:15, 29 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • "though this may be due to simply seasonal differences" Awkward placement of simply (should go after "may").
done   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  18:15, 29 December 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • The intro is very short compared to the article's length, it should summarise the entire article.
Changes look good, this last issue is all that remains. FunkMonk (talk) 10:54, 3 January 2020 (UTC)Reply
done   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  14:52, 3 January 2020 (UTC)Reply
Cool, will pass now, a bit late for the contest, unfortunately. FunkMonk (talk) 16:51, 3 January 2020 (UTC)Reply