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Madison's Edits: Hi Megan! I think that your article is sounding great. Here are just a couple things I noticed that you may or may not decide to look at!

First, one of the things I remember Dr. Burnett mentioning was opening up with a hook about your scholar to first establish their notoriety. That's why I've included my quick blurb about Lana Rakow's scholarly accomplishments right away in my article. I agree that it sounds a little awkward, but it sounds like this site is very focused on establishing notoriety. That part is completely up to you, just thought I'd share!

Second, the last sentence in the section discussing the scholarly work is a little difficult to understand. The Muted Group Theory sounds pretty complex and it might be more useful and easier for you just to link to the Wikipedia page discussing Muted Group Theory.

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  • one thing I noticed overall was how you addressed her, you might want to call her Dr. Kramarae instead of just her last name? Just a suggestion!

Overall the Wikipedia format looks really good!

Background and Education: -Master to Master's -P.h.D. to Ph.D.

When you list the University, I think it would be helpful to say "in Oregon" instead of just the comma

Teaching career section: 1st sentence: no comma needed after professor 2nd sentence: until 1985? 3rd sentence: In 1988, Dr. Kramarae (I think there are too many "she's") also no comma after Oregon

Scholarly Work: -research in first sentence is spelled wrong -second sentence needs a period at the end of it -the last sentence is a little confusing, I think you are trying to say the theory was started by men but that is unclear?

In your drafts/outline: -I think the international dean segment and guest professor of W.S. courses in China, the Netherlands, England, South Africa, and Germany is really interesting and if you can find a way to incorporate it, that would be good!

-For Awards/Honors sections, it may be helpful to list a few in the paragraph and then have an additional list below it of others?

Other than those minor edits it looks really good; really good content and the layout looks professional! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Melissafritz (talkcontribs) 02:50, 7 April 2017 (UTC)Reply


Another good set of edits! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Aburnett412 (talkcontribs) 02:06, 26 April 2017 (UTC)Reply