Talk:Charles Tottenham, 8th Marquess of Ely/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Roc0ast3r (talk · contribs) 02:39, 8 July 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 22:12, 8 July 2024 (UTC)

I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 22:12, 8 July 2024 (UTC)

The coat of arms images are appropriately tagged. Sources are reliable. Spotchecks (footnote numbers refer to this version):

• FN 11 cites "they married on 28 December in the Chapel of the Royal Hospital Chelsea". Verified.
• FN 12 cites "In 1965, Tottenham was second in line to become Marquess of Ely. Upon the death of Guy Alvo Greville Loftus, Tottenham became the heir apparent." Verified.
• FN 3 cites "At the Royal Military College of Canada, Tottenham became an assistant librarian and French teacher. He soon worked as a translator at an insurance company before being employed as a language teacher at Trinity College School in Port Hope, Ontario." Verified, but why "soon"?
  • Modified to "later".  RONIN  TALK  01:26, 9 July 2024 (UTC)

Spotcheck passes. I'll read through the content next and post any comments below. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 22:32, 8 July 2024 (UTC)

Earwig finds no issues. I just have one suggestion from a read-through:

• Tottenham was entitled to sit in the House of Lords until 1999 because of his subsidiary title of Baron Loftus. I don't think a casual reader will understand that that means that the subsidiary title is not in the Peerage of Ireland. It's such a short article that you don't want a digression about this in the body of the article, but how about adding a footnote that explains that the lower title was in the Peerage of England?

The above is a minor point and I'm not going to hold up GA over it; up to you if you want to make that change. I'll go ahead and pass this now. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 10:47, 9 July 2024 (UTC)

Thank you! For your suggestion, I think that the current text explains that: In the Peerage of the United Kingdom, the Marquess of Ely is concurrently Baron Loftus, entitling the Marquess to a seat in the House of Lords. As a result, Tottenham sat in the House as Baron Loftus ..., but I agree that the sentence might not be the most clear. I went ahead and changed that sentence.  RONIN  TALK  15:40, 9 July 2024 (UTC)